Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct short answer but expand with a clear reason and one brief supporting detail. Use correct grammar (e.g. "I wasn't" or "I didn't") and avoid slang. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t. I preferred playing on my iPad because it had many games and videos, so I rarely went to parks as a child.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "because" or "so"). Correct verb forms and articles are important ("I like going to parks now" and "the scenery is beautiful"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because I like the peaceful scenery and fresh air. For example, the trees and flowers help me relax after a busy week.

提案: Answer directly and add a specific reason and possible benefit. Use plural and article forms correctly ("there aren’t many parks"). One or two sentences are sufficient.

例: Yes, I would, because there aren’t many parks in my city and more green spaces would give people places to exercise and relax.

提案: Be concise and grammatical. Give one clear reason with specific details (distance, time, cost) and avoid fillers ("uh"). Use correct tense and structure ("the parks I want to visit are far away; they take 40 minutes to drive and cost too much in petrol"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, not really. The parks I’d like to visit are about a 40-minute drive from my home, which takes too much time and petrol, so I rarely go there.

× I like to going to park now.

✓ I like going to parks now.

The pattern 'like to going' is incorrect. Use either 'like to go' (infinitive) or 'like going' (gerund). Also 'park' should be plural or use an article: 'parks' or 'the park'. Here 'going to parks' fits the general statement. Suggestion: use 'I like going to parks now.'

× The reason why I like to go went to park now because I can see the scenery at the park.

✓ The reason why I like going to parks now is that I can see the scenery in the park.

The sentence contains 'went' incorrectly placed; 'went' is past tense and not needed. Also word order and verb forms are wrong. Use 'is that' to introduce the reason and 'going' (gerund) or 'to go' consistently. Use 'parks' or 'the park' and 'in' the park for scenery. Suggestion: 'The reason why I like going to parks now is that I can see the scenery in the park.'

× It was very beautiful.

✓ It is very beautiful.

The student is describing a current state of the park after saying they like going now, so present tense 'is' is appropriate. Using past tense 'was' implies it is no longer beautiful. Suggestion: use present tense when stating ongoing qualities: 'It is very beautiful.'

× Yes, because there's not a lot of parks in my city.

✓ Yes, because there aren't a lot of parks in my city.

'There's' is a contraction of 'there is' (singular), but 'parks' is plural. Use 'there aren't' (there are not) for plural nouns. Suggestion: match the verb with the plural noun: 'there aren't a lot of parks.'

× No, because, uh, the parks that I want to go in the future is was very far away from my home.

✓ No, because the parks that I want to go to in the future are very far away from my home.

Use the correct preposition 'go to' (not 'go in'). Also 'in the future' should follow the verb phrase. Subject-verb agreement: 'parks' is plural so use 'are' not 'is' or 'was'. Remove unnecessary filler words. Suggestion: 'the parks that I want to go to in the future are very far away from my home.'

× It was a 40 minutes drive and I did not have much time.

✓ It is a 40-minute drive and I don't have much time.

When talking about a general fact (distance/time) relevant now and future plans, use present tense 'is' and present simple 'don't have' (or 'didn't have' only if referring to a past occasion). Also '40 minutes drive' should be '40-minute drive' (compound adjective). Suggestion: 'It is a 40-minute drive and I don't have much time.'

× I, uh, I, it will, uh, take a lot of gas money.

✓ It will take a lot of money for gas.

The original is disfluent and uses 'a lot of gas money' awkwardly. Better phrasing is 'a lot of money for gas' or 'a lot of gas money' with cleaner structure. Also remove repeated fillers. Suggestion: 'It will take a lot of money for gas.'