Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然且条理清晰。首先给出一个完整的主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持。注意语法（时态和名词单复数）和发音容易造成的词形错误（如 pray 用错）。可以用连接词来衔接句子，例如 because / so / and. 将回答控制在3-4句内，避免重复。

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were a place to play and exercise. For example, I used to ride my bike and play football with friends every afternoon. That routine helped me stay active and made the parks feel like a second home.

提案: 回答总体清楚但有重复和填充词（uh, I can）较多。应减少语气词，使用连贯词（for example, so, after）使表达更流畅；注意不定式和动名词搭配（relax and exercise，不要加 to）。建议把句子合并为一到两句并加入具体活动细节。

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially after work, because they help me relax and exercise. For instance, I usually walk for 30 minutes and sometimes do stretching or light jogging to unwind.

提案: 回答不自然且有明显错误（"I see my name" 无意义）。应直接回答并给出理由及具体影响，例如健康或社区活动。避免祈使句向考官请求建设公园，改为表达个人想法。使用连词（because, so）和正确的名词形式（good things → good for people）。

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they encourage people to exercise and socialize. More green spaces would improve public health and provide safe places for families to spend time together.

提案: 回答含糊且有语法错误（their → there / take my parents go there），结尾句“it's very bad”与前文矛盾且无明确指代。应先给出直接肯定句，再说明具体计划和原因，避免矛盾表达。控制句子数量并给出具体公园类型或活动作为细节。

例: Yes, I plan to visit several parks in the future and I will take my children and parents with me. We usually go in the mornings to walk or do tai chi, which is a healthy routine for the whole family.

× Yes, I like going. I like going to park because every day when I go to park I can do my exercise and take a good pray, take a good prayers.

✓ Yes, I liked going. I liked going to parks because every day when I went to the park I could exercise and say good prayers.

该句讲过去的童年经历，时态应使用过去时（Present tense issue -> 应为过去时）。另外，名词“park”在泛指可数名词需用复数或加冠词（a/the），及“do my exercise”更自然为“exercise”，“take a good pray(s)”表达不正确，应为“say prayers”或“pray”。建议：回忆过去时使用过去式（liked, went, could），可用复数“parks”或定冠词“the park”，祈祷用短语“say prayers”。

× Yes, I also, I still like going to park now, uh, because every day, uh, when I finish my work, I can go there and I can, uh, I can relax and to exercise.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because every day when I finish my work I can go there to relax and exercise.

句子中有冗余重复及不正确的动词形式（to relax and to exercise 与前面can搭配时应用动词原形）。“going to park”中的“park”应为复数或加冠词。建议：删去多余的停顿词和重复，使用动词原形（relax, exercise），并使用复数或冠词（parks/the park）。

× Yes, I see my name. Please build parks in my city. Umm. And many people do exercise in the morning and at night and it's good things for people.

✓ Yes, I think so. Please build more parks in my city. Many people exercise in the morning and at night, and it's a good thing for them.

原句“see my name”不合语境，应为表达同意或愿望的短语（I think so）。“Please build parks”如果想表达希望更多公园，需加more或表愿望。名词短语“do exercise”可简化为“exercise”。“it's good things”主谓数不一致，应为“it's a good thing”或“they are good things”。建议：用合适的表达代替不相关的短语，注意可数名词数和主谓一致。

× Yes, there are many parks I want to go to in the future and I also will take my children to their and also I'll take my parents go there because we can do exercise in the morning and evening and and it's very bad.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I want to visit in the future. I will also take my children and my parents there because we can exercise in the morning and evening, and it's very good.

句中有多处时态和结构问题：应使用将来时表达计划（will visit, will take）。“take my children to their”中的“their”错误，应为“there”。“take my parents go there”语法不正确，应为“take my parents there”。句末“it's very bad”与上下文正面描述矛盾，应为“very good”。建议：使用正确的副词/代词（there），将动词短语结构调整为“take someone there”，并确保形容词与语境一致。