Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Уменьшите повторения, используйте правильную грамматику и добавьте связное краткое пояснение. Начните с прямого предложения, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные детали. Обратите внимание на порядок слов, использование прошедшего времени (used to, went) и согласование чисел (we liked).

例: Yes, I used to enjoy going to parks when I was a child. I often went there with my parents, where we would buy ice cream and walk the dog together.

提案: Исправьте грамматические формы (например, I like going, I usually run) и избегайте лишних повтора. Дайте связное объяснение, используя связки (for example, because, so) и укажите конкретные действия или причины, почему вам нравятся парки сейчас.

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and good for exercise. For example, I usually go jogging there and sometimes play games with my siblings.

提案: Уберите междометия (uh, umm), сформулируйте причину кратко и ясно, используйте связующие слова (because, therefore) и конкретные выгоды (health, relaxation, family activities). Сократите до 2–3 предложений и используйте корректную лексику (relaxing, beneficial for my health, have picnics).

例: Yes, I would like more parks because they are relaxing and beneficial for my health. For instance, I often have picnics there with my family and go for walks.

提案: Ответ слишком короткий и не объясняет причину. Даже для отрицательного ответа дайте одно дополнение или причину, используя связки (not really, because, however) и при необходимости упомяните альтернативу. Ответ должен быть 1–2 предложений.

例: Not really — I don't have a specific park in mind, but I would like to visit any well-maintained park nearby when I have time.

× Yes, I used to like going to parks when I was child.

✓ Yes, I used to like going to parks when I was a child.

The noun 'child' requires the indefinite article 'a' in this context. Add 'a' to form 'a child'. Use 'a' before singular countable nouns when speaking generally.

× I I had to go and go to the parks with my parents.

✓ I had to go to the parks with my parents.

The sentence contains an unnecessary repetition ('I I' and 'go and go') creating a sentence structure error. Remove the duplicates to make the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× We like spending time spending time and each each ice creams and walk, walk the dog.

✓ We liked spending time together, eating ice creams and walking the dog.

Multiple issues: repetition ('spending time spending time', 'each each', 'walk, walk'), incorrect verb forms and missing preposition. For past context use 'liked'. Use gerunds ('eating', 'walking') after 'spending time' or list activities. Use 'together' to show joint activity and correct 'each each' to nothing or 'each other' if intended, but here 'together' is clearer.

× Yes, I like go to the parks now.

✓ Yes, I like going to the parks now.

After the verb 'like' the gerund form ('going') is required when referring to general activities. Use 'like going' not 'like go'.

× It's very interesting.

✓ They are very pleasant.

Context: talking about parks (plural). 'It' refers to singular; use 'They are' or restructure. Also 'pleasant' or 'nice' is more natural than 'interesting' for parks. Adjust number agreement.

× I usually run around the parks and I I spending time with my parents, with my siblings.

✓ I usually run around the parks and I spend time with my parents and my siblings.

'I I' is repeated. 'Spending' needs the auxiliary 'do' in present simple: use 'I spend'. Also avoid redundant commas and use 'and' to connect parents and siblings.

× I I like play at the park.

✓ I like playing at the park.

After 'like' use gerund 'playing' rather than base verb 'play'. Also remove the repeated 'I'.

× Yes, because uh, parks find relaxing and uh good, good for my health and uh I like I enjoy around the parks and umm and uh have a picnic with my parents with my.

✓ Yes, because parks are relaxing and good for my health, and I enjoy being in the parks and having picnics with my parents.

Multiple issues: 'parks find relaxing' is incorrect; use 'parks are relaxing'. Remove filler repetitions ('uh', 'good, good'). Use 'enjoy being in the parks' or 'enjoy going to the parks' and 'having picnics with my parents' completes the sentence. The original ends abruptly and repeats pronouns incorrectly.