Parks— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Did you like going to parks as a child?
受験者
Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. I usually go there on the weekends with my parents and I enjoyed playing badminton or flying a kite with them and it is still an unforgettable experience for me.
試験官
Do you still like going to parks now?
受験者
Yes, I still like going to parks. Now my favorite park is the Han River Park because it is near my home and the scenery is beautiful. I usually go there in the sunset time and look at the sky for a while. It is the best part of.
試験官
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
受験者
Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because Hull is such a congested and quick city so I think people living in there really need some places to heal. I think hers can be the healing spots for urban people.
試験官
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
受験者
I want to visit the Olympic Park in the future because my friend recently recommended the place to me. I heard that it has a lot of tortures and the air is so refreshing.
評価
総合
Part 1
Did you like going to parks as a child?
スコア: 72.0提案: 문법과 시제 일관성을 개선하세요. 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 유지하고 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 문장들 사이의 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예: 주제 문장(Yes, I did.) → 구체적 활동(played badminton, flew kites) → 느낌(why it was memorable).
例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went to parks with my parents at weekends, where we played badminton and flew kites. Those outings were unforgettable because I felt free outdoors and we spent quality family time together.
Do you still like going to parks now?
スコア: 68.0提案: 문장을 완결해서 말하세요. 일부 문장이 불완전하고 어색한 표현(“sunset time”, “It is the best part of.”)이 있습니다. 연결어를 사용해 이유와 습관을 명확히 제시하고 어휘를 조금 다양하게 쓰세요.
例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. My favorite is Han River Park because it is close to my home and has beautiful scenery. I usually visit around sunset to watch the sky, which I find very relaxing, and that peaceful moment is my favorite part of the day.
Would you like to see more parks in your city?
スコア: 60.0提案: 단어 선택과 표현을 정확히 하세요(예: ‘quick city’와 ‘hers’는 부적절). 또한 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 연결어로 논리를 강화하세요. 예: congestion, stressful lifestyle, provide green spaces for relaxation.
例: Yes, I would. Hull is quite congested and fast-paced, so more parks would give residents green spaces to relax and reduce stress. For example, small neighborhood parks could offer benches and walking paths where people can unwind after work.
Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?
スコア: 55.0提案: 단어 선택을 정확히 하세요. ‘tortures’는 잘못된 단어로 의도는 ‘towers’, ‘trails’, ‘trees’ 등일 수 있습니다. 추천 이유를 구체적으로 말하고, 연결어로 계획을 표현하세요. 또한 문장은 자연스럽고 간결하게 유지하세요.
例: I plan to visit Olympic Park in the near future because a friend recommended it. I heard it has many walking trails and green areas, and that the air there is very fresh, so I’m looking forward to exploring it.
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