Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên nói trực tiếp trả lời (có/không) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với cấu trúc câu rõ ràng, dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp và tránh lặp từ. Chú ý phát âm quá khứ (attended) và dùng cụm từ thích hợp cho nơi ngoài trời (the park/outdoor places). Hạn chế câu quá dài và sửa ngữ pháp: I didn't go to the park much because I often attended church and was busy doing homework, so I didn't have time to go outside.

例: No, I didn't go to parks much as a child. I often attended church and had a lot of homework, so I usually spent my free time at home instead.

提案: Câu trả lời cần mạch lạc hơn: bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh từ sai (small fear?). Dùng tính từ phù hợp (peaceful atmosphere, shaded by trees) và sửa ngữ pháp (I enjoy exercising, hanging out with friends). Giữ 2–4 câu ngắn gọn, cụ thể về tần suất hoặc hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and the shade from the trees, and I often exercise there. I also like hanging out with friends, so I usually visit the park at least twice a week.

提案: Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích lý do rõ ràng với cụm từ tự nhiên (peaceful atmosphere, relax/release stress). Sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ (after a long day's work). Có thể thêm ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích (exercise, family time) để câu thêm thuyết phục.

例: Yes, I would. Parks provide a peaceful atmosphere where people can relax and relieve stress after a long day's work. They also offer space for exercise and family activities.

提案: Cần nêu rõ tên và vị trí, dùng ngữ pháp đúng (There is a national park I want to visit. It's located in Dong Nai). Tránh tiếng lắp và sửa cấu trúc (It's really enjoyable/it's a beautiful place). Thêm lý do cụ thể vì sao muốn đến (scenery, activities) để câu rõ ràng và tự nhiên.

例: Yes. I want to visit Nam Cat Tien National Park in Dong Nai. It's famous for its rich wildlife and beautiful forests, and I hope to see animals and go on a nature walk there.

× As I was trying I didn't go to the park much as much because I often attending attended church and was busy doing homework at home so I didn't have time to outdoor place.

✓ As a child I didn't go to the park much because I often attended church and was busy doing homework at home, so I didn't have time to go outdoors.

Incorrect use of verb + -ing: 'attending' was used incorrectly in the sentence and should be the past tense 'attended' to match 'didn't go' and the time frame. Also 'to outdoor place' is ungrammatical; use the infinitive 'to go outdoors' or 'to go to outdoor places'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense for repeated past activities ('often attended'), use 'go outdoors' for the action, and simplify the opening phrase to 'As a child' for clarity.

× Yes I do because I really love the atmosphere, the peaceful and small fear and I love doing exercise with the surrounded tree and with my hang out with my friends. I usually go to the park.

✓ Yes, I do because I really love the atmosphere; it is peaceful and pleasant, and I enjoy exercising among the trees and hanging out with my friends. I usually go to the park.

Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure affecting present tense description: 'the peaceful and small fear' is nonsensical and likely intended to be 'peaceful and pleasant'. 'Doing exercise with the surrounded tree' is incorrect; use 'exercising among the trees'. 'My hang out with my friends' should be 'hanging out with my friends'. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual actions ('I usually go'), use correct adjective choices, and use gerund forms 'enjoy exercising' and 'hanging out' when describing activities you like.

× Yes, I would like to because parks give us the peacefulness atmosphere that we can enjoy and release our strength where after the long day work.

✓ Yes, I would like to because parks give us a peaceful atmosphere where we can relax and recover our energy after a long day of work.

Tense and word choice errors: 'give us the peacefulness atmosphere' is awkward—use 'give us a peaceful atmosphere'. 'Release our strength' is incorrect; use 'recover our energy' or 'relax'. Word order 'where after the long day work' is incorrect; use 'after a long day of work'. Suggestions: use 'would like' for willingness, and use idiomatic phrases 'relax' or 'recover energy' and proper article 'a peaceful atmosphere'.

× Yes, there is one famous place that I want to go. There is uh, Namcatian National Parks. It's located in Dongai and it's really have enjoy for.

✓ Yes, there is one famous place I want to visit: Namcatian National Park. It is located in Dongai and I would really enjoy going there.

There be errors and noun number agreement: 'There is one famous place that I want to go' is acceptable but 'that I want to go' should be 'that I want to visit'. 'Namcatian National Parks' uses plural 'Parks' incorrectly if referring to a single park; use singular 'Park'. 'It's really have enjoy for' is ungrammatical; use 'I would really enjoy going there' or 'It would be really enjoyable.' Suggestions: use 'visit' with 'want to', ensure noun number matches ('Park' vs 'Parks'), and use correct verb phrases ('I would enjoy').