Parks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove repetitions and grammar errors (tense, articles). Use a linking phrase for clarity if needed.

例: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often spent entire afternoons there playing on the swings and climbing trees, which made me feel very happy and free.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar and word choice. Begin with a clear statement, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so). Use correct verb forms and vocabulary (watch trees, play ball).

例: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For example, when I feel upset or bored at home I go to Grand Park to sit and look at the trees because the quiet atmosphere relaxes me, or I play ball with friends to lift my mood.

提案: Good direct answer and clear reasons. To improve, add a brief specific example or comparison and a linking word to show development. Use slightly more precise vocabulary (green spaces, community parks).

例: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green spaces to relax and exercise. For example, having several small community parks near neighborhoods would make it easier for families like mine to explore and spend time outdoors.

提案: Clarify the main idea and avoid vague references. Start with a clear statement (No/Not really), then explain briefly why and give one specific plan or source for finding parks (recommendations, websites). Correct grammar and coherence.

例: Not at the moment. If I decide to visit a new park in the future, I will check social media or local websites for recommendations and information about available activities, such as playgrounds, sports fields, or walking trails.

× I really like the park. When I was a child I I was very happy and I can play all the time in the park so I decided.

✓ I really liked the park. When I was a child I was very happy and I could play all the time in the park, so I decided to go there often.

Tense inconsistency and modal choice: the student mixes present 'like' and 'can' with past context 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' and modal 'could' for ability in the past. Also 'decided' needs an object: 'decided to go there often'. Use a comma before 'so' when joining independent clauses. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Of course I like Grand Park. When I feel upset or when I feel bored in my room, I can just sit down and watch the tree early. Or maybe I want to playing ball.

✓ Of course I like Grand Park. When I feel upset or bored in my room, I can just sit down and watch the trees. Or maybe I want to play ball.

Verb form and word choice errors: 'watch the tree early' is unclear; likely plural 'trees' and drop 'early'. 'Want to playing' is incorrect — after 'want to' use the base form 'play'. Also omit the repeated 'when I feel'. Ensure present tense consistency for habitual actions. (Grammar problem type ID:6 and ID:8)

× For now, not yet, but when I want to go to the park, I I can't see in my social media to recommend it park in the city and what activities that I can't do there. Yeah, something like that.

✓ For now, not yet, but when I want to go to a park, I check social media for recommendations about parks in the city and the activities I can do there.

Multiple problems: incorrect modal/auxiliary and verb forms and word order. 'I can't see in my social media to recommend it park' is ungrammatical. Use present simple 'check social media' for habitual action, 'for recommendations about parks' for correct preposition and article use, and 'activities I can do' (not 'can't do') to match intended meaning. Also remove duplicated 'I'. (Grammar problem type ID:8 and ID:11 and ID:22)