Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ và lời nói thừa (filler). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng thì đúng (I enjoy taking photos), bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về loại cảnh bạn thích và cảm xúc khi chụp. Ví dụ nêu nơi, thời điểm, hoặc mục đích chụp để câu trả lời giàu nội dung và mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photographs, especially of landscapes. I like taking photos when I travel because I want to capture beautiful moments and remember how a place looked. For example, I often photograph sunrise scenes in mountains because the light makes the view look magical.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý chính rõ ràng nhưng ngữ pháp và liên kết cần chính xác hơn. Sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên từ để giải thích lý do (for example, because, so). Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về trải nghiệm ở nông thôn để minh họa cảm nhận về yên tĩnh, không khí trong lành và cảnh quan xanh.

例: I prefer rural areas because they are more peaceful and quiet than cities. For example, when I visit the countryside I enjoy walking along green fields and breathing fresh air, which helps me relax and take better photos.

提案: Nội dung chưa rõ ràng, ngữ pháp và từ vựng dùng sai khiến ý không mạch lạc. Cần trả lời trực tiếp (own country or other countries), giải thích lý do bằng câu rõ ràng, tránh dịch từng từ tiếng Việt. Nên nêu ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: historical sites, famous landmarks) và liên kết lý do với cảm xúc hoặc kinh nghiệm cá nhân.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing new cultures and historical landmarks. For instance, visiting ancient cities in Europe lets me see unique architecture and learn about history, which I find exciting.

× Oh yes, Oh yes, actually I enjoy taking photo because I feel beautiful green and keep memorize.

✓ Oh yes, oh yes. Actually, I enjoy taking photos because I feel relaxed and want to keep the memories.

Student used 'taking photo' (singular) but after 'enjoy' the noun should be plural 'photos' or use gerund correctly; 'enjoy taking photos'. 'Feel beautiful green' is ungrammatical and likely intended 'feel relaxed' or 'feel refreshed'; choose a natural adjective. 'keep memorize' mixes verbs; correct form is 'keep the memories' or 'remember'. Suggestion: use 'enjoy taking photos', replace incorrect adjectives with appropriate ones, and use set phrase 'keep the memories' or 'remember them'.

× Uh, I like take photo when traveling and umm I want capture a beautiful moment.

✓ Uh, I like taking photos when traveling and I want to capture beautiful moments.

After 'like' use gerund 'taking' not base verb 'take'. Use plural 'photos' and plural 'moments' for general statements. Also add 'to' for 'want to capture' or use 'I want to capture'. Suggestion: use 'I like taking photos when traveling' and 'I want to capture beautiful moments'.

× Oh actually I think prefer rural areas because I like peaceful and quiet.

✓ Oh actually, I prefer rural areas because I like peaceful and quiet places.

Missing subject 'I' before 'prefer' in original; also original lacks 'places' after adjectives. 'I think prefer' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I prefer'. Suggestion: include subject and complete noun phrase: 'I prefer rural areas because I like peaceful and quiet places'.

× I think rural area less crowded and fresh air naturally green.

✓ I think rural areas are less crowded and have fresh, naturally green air.

Use plural 'rural areas' for generalization. Missing verb 'are' for 'less crowded'. 'Fresh air naturally green' is word order problem; correct to 'have fresh, naturally green air' or 'the air is fresh and naturally green'. Suggestion: include appropriate verb and reorder adjectives.

× I think I prefer views older country because I refer views in all the country and I want experience new place I live versus century and I think more famous landmark.

✓ I think I prefer views in older countries because I want to see sights in different countries and experience new places; they may have more famous landmarks.

This sentence has multiple tense and word choice errors. 'Views older country' should be 'views in older countries' or 'in other countries'. 'I refer views in all the country' is incorrect; likely 'I want to see sights in different countries'. 'I want experience' needs 'to' before verb: 'want to experience'. 'I live versus century' is unclear; removed and replaced with coherent idea. Suggestion: simplify into clear clauses: 'I prefer views in other countries because I want to see sights in different countries and want to experience new places; they may have more famous landmarks.'