Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency, be concise and directly relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid tense and subject-verb errors, and link the two ideas (hobby and work) with a connecting phrase. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences and provide one specific supporting detail.

例: Yes, I do. Taking photos from different angles gives a fuller impression of a scene, and I enjoy experimenting with perspectives. In my work as a dentist I also photograph cases to track progress, so I have become comfortable with taking clear, well‑lit shots.

提案: Be more natural and varied in vocabulary and add a linking word to connect your preference and reason. Provide a specific example of a rural scene or why sunsets attract you to make the answer more vivid.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and often more dramatic, especially at sunset. For example, I like photographing fields and hills as the sun sets behind them, since the warm light and open space create strong colours and interesting silhouettes.

提案: Correct grammar and avoid repetition; finish your thought. Start with a clear topic sentence, contrast with a linking word (however or while), and give a specific reason or example for each preference. Keep sentences concise and fix adjective/adverb use.

例: I like both local and foreign views. At home I feel relaxed because I know the places and their rhythms, while traveling abroad excites me because I can discover new landscapes and cultures — for example, seeing a coastal town in another country can be inspiring and different from what I know.

× Yes, taking pictures from different angles give you a more complete view of the scenery.

✓ Yes, taking pictures from different angles gives you a more complete view of the scenery.

The subject of the sentence is the gerund phrase 'taking pictures from different angles', which is singular, so the verb must be 'gives' not 'give'. Suggestion: match verb number to the gerund phrase as a singular unit (taking... gives).

× As a dentist, I often need to document patient cases, so I usually takes.

✓ As a dentist, I often need to document patient cases, so I usually take (photos).

The subject pronoun 'I' requires the base verb form 'take', not 'takes' which is third person singular. Also the sentence ends abruptly; add the object 'photos' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'I take' for actions by the speaker and include the object if implied.

× Both have their own beauty but I prefer rural areas views because they are more natural and breathtaking.

✓ Both have their own beauty, but I prefer views in rural areas because they are more natural and breathtaking.

The phrase 'rural areas views' is an incorrect word order; use 'views in rural areas' or 'rural views'. Also add a comma before 'but' to separate clauses. Suggestion: place modifiers before the noun ('rural views') or use 'views in rural areas' for clarity.

× I usually take photos for the sunset.

✓ I usually take photos of the sunset.

The preposition 'for' is incorrect here; use 'of' to indicate the object being photographed. This is a preposition issue combined with the verb phrase. Suggestion: say 'take photos of' or 'take photos at sunset' depending on intended meaning.

× Actually, I prefer both. I'm familiar with the views of my home country, which makes me feel more comfortable and relaxed, whereas traveling overseas makes me feel more excite, excited and.

✓ Actually, I prefer both. I'm familiar with the views of my home country, which makes me feel more comfortable and relaxed, whereas traveling overseas makes me feel more excited and curious.

The adjective 'excited' is correct for describing feelings; 'excite' is a verb and cannot be used here. The original also ends abruptly with 'and.' Add a second adjective like 'curious' to complete the comparison. Suggestion: use adjective forms for feelings and finish the sentence with a parallel adjective.