Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır ama doğal akış, dilbilgisi ve kelime seçimi geliştirilmelidir. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu sözcükleri (ör. "uh") azaltılmalı; cümleler daha düzgün yapılandırılmalı. Ayrıca cevap doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı, ardından nedenler veya örneklerle desteklenmelidir. Örnek: seyahat etmeyi ve farklı kültürleri gördüğünü belirtip, fotoğrafın neden anı olduğunu ve hangi tür manzaraları tercih ettiğini belirt.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love traveling and exploring new places. Photos help me remember the atmosphere and details of each location, such as the architecture in a city or the colors of a sunrise in the countryside.

提案: Cevap açık değil ve bazı kelimeler yanlış kullanılmış (ör. "wheels" yerine muhtemelen "views"). Daha net bir konu cümlesi kullanılmalı ve tercih nedenleri mantıklı bağlaçlarla sunulmalı. Örneklerle desteklenmeli (alışveriş merkezleri, tarihî yapılar, etkinlikler gibi) ve dolgu kelimeler azaltılmalı.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a lot of variety, such as interesting architecture, museums and regular cultural events. For example, seeing a historic square or a busy market gives me more to photograph than a quiet rural scene.

提案: Cevap kararsız ve dağınık. Sınavda net ve doğrudan cevap vermek önemlidir; eğer seçemiyorsanız bunu mantıklı sebeplerle açıklayın. Cümleleri düzgün kurun (ör. "have a very good views" yerine "also has very good views"). Nedenlerini bağlaçlarla belirtin ve örnek verin.

例: I can't really choose between them because both have strengths. For instance, Istanbul has historic landmarks and vibrant street life, while foreign countries often offer very different landscapes and cultures that are exciting to photograph.

× Yes, I like because, uh, they are different countries in this earth and uh, I like traveling, traveling some uh, country or different place. I like it taking pictures because they are the uh, memories.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures because they show different countries and places on Earth. I enjoy traveling to different countries and I like taking pictures because they capture memories.

The original sentences have multiple structure issues: awkward clause order, incorrect pronoun references ('they are different countries in this earth'), unnecessary repetition, and wrong word forms ('I like it taking pictures'). Suggestions: combine ideas into clear sentences, use 'show' or 'capture' for what pictures do, use 'places on Earth' instead of 'in this earth', and say 'I enjoy traveling to different countries'. Use simple subject-verb-object order to improve clarity.

× I prefer, uh, wheels in urban areas because they have so many things about shopping center or some different, uh, statue or concert. So many things.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because there are many attractions such as shopping centers, statues, and concerts.

The student said 'wheels' instead of 'views' (word choice) and used 'have so many things about' which is incorrect adjective/adverb use and collocation. Suggestions: use 'views' or 'scenery', use 'there are' for existence, and list examples with correct nouns and plural forms ('shopping centers', 'statues', 'concerts'). Keep phrases concise and use correct collocations like 'attractions such as'.

× I can say anything because I like my country's views in Istanbul and the other country is have a very good views too. I can't sit and think about this, sorry. I can't choose.

✓ I can't choose; I like the views in my country, especially Istanbul, and other countries have very good views too.

Problems include incorrect pronoun/reference and verb form: 'the other country is have a very good views' mixes 'is' with 'have' and uses plural 'views' with 'a very good'. Also 'I can say anything because' is unclear. Suggestions: express inability to choose directly ('I can't choose'), use correct verb agreement ('other countries have'), and correct article and number agreement ('very good views' without 'a').