Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 内容要点明确，但语法、流畅性和冗余较多。建议：1) 修正语法（如动词形式和冠词），避免重复的填充词（uh, I have…）。2) 控制长度（不超过5句），首句直接回答，随后给出1-2个具体支持细节（如拍摄原因或常拍的景物）。3) 使用连接词使句子更连贯（e.g. because, so, and）。具体练习：把回答拆成主题句+原因+细节，练习自然停顿，减少“um/uh”。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of beautiful landscapes when I travel because it helps me remember places and moods. For example, I often photograph sunsets and old streets, and I usually bring three cameras so I can use different lenses for close-ups and wide shots.

提案: 回答方向合适但表达不够准确和具体。建议：1) 使用完整句并注意单复数与形容词顺序（e.g. modern architecture, really cool）。2) 增加具体对比理由，使用连接词（e.g. while, whereas）。3) 避免笼统词汇“some scenery”，改为具体描写（e.g. rolling hills, quiet rivers）。练习：构建一到两句的对比句型，清楚表明偏好并给出理由。

例: I like both, but for different reasons. Urban areas have striking modern architecture and lively streets, while rural areas offer peaceful landscapes like rolling hills and quiet rivers, so I enjoy photographing both depending on my mood.

提案: 答案重复且语法混乱，缺乏清晰结构和具体细节。建议：1) 首句直接回答问题（e.g. I don't have a strong preference），然后给出原因。2) 避免重复表达（modern building / modern building it's really cool）。3) 提供具体例子（如本国的古迹或外国的山脉），并用连接词使逻辑清晰。练习：准备一句总体看法加两句分别说明本国与外国的不同吸引点。

例: I don't have a strong preference — both can be inspiring. For example, in my country I enjoy photographing historic architecture and traditional markets, while abroad I like capturing unique skylines and natural landmarks that I haven't seen before.

× Definitely, yes, I really like to taking some photo of those beautiful views that I while I'm traveling, Uh, and I have a, uh, I have three cameras that I always, uh, take.

✓ Definitely, yes, I really like taking photos of those beautiful views while I'm traveling, and I always take three cameras with me.

句中出現不正確的動詞不定式結構“like to taking”應使用“like doing”或“like to do”兩種結構之一；因此應改為“like taking”。此外，名詞“photo”在此為可數複數，應為“photos”。短語“that I while I'm traveling”語序和連接不正確，應簡化為“while I'm traveling”。最後“have three cameras that I always take”語序冗長，常用表達是“I always take three cameras with me”。建議：學習“like + -ing”和“like to + 動詞原形”的用法區別，注意可數名詞複數形式，並使用常見固定搭配（take ... with me）。

× I love both. In urban areas there are many different modern architecture that really really cool and in rural area it has some scenery.

✓ I love both. In urban areas there are many different modern buildings that are really, really cool, and in rural areas there is beautiful scenery.

此處“architecture”常用作不可數名詞表示建築（學/風格），若指具體建築物應使用可數名詞“buildings”。“modern architecture that really really cool”缺少謂語動詞，應改為“buildings that are really...”。另外“in rural area”應為複數或加冠詞，常用“in rural areas”或“in the rural area”；句尾“it has some scenery”主語與動詞搭配不當，應用“There is/are”結構或直接說“there is beautiful scenery”。建議：注意不可數與可數名詞的區別；保持主謂一致；使用自然的存在句“There is/are”。

× I love both in urban city they are really impressive architecture and modern building. Modern building it's really cool and while whereas in rural city I really appreciate the peaceful scenery, it's helped me.

✓ I love both. In urban cities there are really impressive buildings and modern architecture. Modern buildings are really cool, whereas in rural areas I really appreciate the peaceful scenery; it helps me.

“urban city”冗餘且“city”與“urban”重複，常說“urban areas”或“cities”。“impressive architecture and modern building”中的“architecture”可以保留但“building”應為複數“buildings”。“Modern building it's really cool”語法錯誤，主謂應為“Modern buildings are really cool”。“while whereas”重複，選用一個連接詞即可。最後“it's helped me”時態和表達不當，應為“It helps me”表示常態。建議：避免冗詞（urban city），注意名詞單複數及主謂一致，選用合適的連詞並用現在時描述常態感受。