Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and complete: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct grammar (e.g., 'the nature' -> 'nature'), and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I do. I love photographing nature because it helps me capture peaceful moments and interesting details like light on leaves or reflections in water. For example, when I visit a park I often try to capture the way sunlight filters through trees.

提案: Avoid informal interjections like 'Yo' and give a fuller answer: state your preference, give a reason, and add a brief example or contrast using a linking word. Keep sentences natural and grammatically correct.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and architectural variety of cities. For instance, I like photographing skylines and busy streets, whereas rural scenes can feel quieter and less dynamic.

提案: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'views... are'), avoid repeating phrases like 'I think', and include a specific example or detail. Use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel more familiar and calming. For example, the coastal landscapes near my hometown have wide beaches and quiet walking paths, which help me relax and take better photos.

× Actually, yeah, because I love the nature.

✓ Actually, yeah, because I love nature.

Article error (ID 22): 'the nature' is incorrect when speaking about nature in general. Use the uncountable noun 'nature' without the definite article. Suggestion: Remove 'the' when referring to nature in general.

× Yo, I like urban areas.

✓ Yes, I like urban areas.

Incorrect use of pronouns / informal filler (ID 12): 'Yo' is an informal interjection unsuitable for a test response. Replace with a standard affirmative like 'Yes' or 'I'. Suggestion: Use appropriate register for the context.

× I actually prefer the views in my country because I was born here and I think that the views here in my country is very natural and I think that it's very calming and soothing for me.

✓ I actually prefer the views in my country because I was born here and I think that the views here are very natural, and I think that they're very calming and soothing for me.

Subject-verb agreement error (ID 27) and article error (ID 22): 'the views... is' is incorrect because the plural subject 'views' requires the plural verb 'are'. Also 'the views here in my country' is wordy; keeping 'the' is acceptable but ensure verb agreement. Suggestions: Match plural subjects with plural verbs ('views... are'), consider contracting repeated clauses for clarity, and maintain consistent plural pronoun ('they're').