Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰，有主题句并给出例子，但存在语法错误、词汇使用不准（如 "my makes"、"shooting up from above"），以及少量冗余。请注意句子结构的完整性，修正名词单复数、冠词和介词的使用，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。例如把错误短语改为“it makes my pictures more interesting”，“shooting from a low angle”或“shooting from above”。建议把回答控制在3-4句内，避免填充词（uh, umm）。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different viewpoints because they help me notice fine details and make my pictures more interesting. For example, shooting from a low angle can make ordinary buildings look dramatic, while shooting from above reveals repeating patterns in streets and roofs.

提案: 回答包含对比但语法和词语搭配问题较多（如“enjoying photographing”、“lefty atmosphere”、“modern night feel”），句子不够连贯。建议先给出直接的主题句，然后用连接词（for example, while, because）引出具体细节。修正搭配并用更准确的词汇表达城市和乡村的特点，例如“vibrant atmosphere”、“peaceful landscapes”。控制句子数量并避免碎片句。

例: I like both urban and rural views because they offer different qualities. In the city I enjoy photographing tall buildings and the vibrant atmosphere, which creates dramatic compositions, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful landscapes like rolling fields that feel more relaxing and natural.

提案: 回答表达了明确立场并给出原因，但有填充词（uh, umm）、语法错误和用词不当（如“various of sceneries”）。建议去掉填充词，改用正确搭配如“a wide variety of scenery”或“many different landscapes”，并稍微具体化举例说明你喜欢的景色类型以增加内容丰富度。

例: I prefer the views in my own country because China is very large and offers a wide variety of scenery. For example, you can photograph dramatic mountains in the west, ancient towns in the east, and vast coastlines in the south.

× Yes, I enjoy taking photos from different perspectives because it helps me notice more details and my makes my picture more interesting.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos from different perspectives because it helps me notice more details and makes my pictures more interesting.

句子中出现了多余或错误的词语：“my makes” 是不正确的搭配，应该去掉“my”并将“picture”改为复数“pictures”（与前文泛指多张照片一致）。这是形容词/副词与其他词搭配错误的表现，应使用动词“makes”直接作用于主语“it”或复数名词“pictures”。建议去掉多余代词，注意名词单复数一致。

× For example, shooting from low angle makes ordinary building look dramatic, and shooting up from above can show patterns.

✓ For example, shooting from a low angle makes ordinary buildings look dramatic, and shooting from above can show patterns.

“shooting from low angle” 缺少冠词，且“building” 应为复数以与一般陈述相符；“shooting up from above” 表达冗余且含义不清，改为“shooting from above” 更自然。这里涉及动名词短语的正确用法（动名词 + 介词短语），需注意冠词、名词单复数和固定搭配。建议在类似结构中使用“a/an” 表示任意一个角度，并保持名词单复数一致。

× Well, I like views in both urban and rural areas. In the city enjoying photographing tall buildings and dramatic city space because of the lefty atmosphere, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful scenes like rolling fields and modern night feel more relaxing and natural.

✓ Well, I like views in both urban and rural areas. In the city, I enjoy photographing tall buildings and dramatic city spaces because of the lively atmosphere, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful scenes like rolling fields; the quiet nights feel more relaxing and natural.

原句在第二句缺少主语和谓语（“In the city enjoying photographing…” 应改为“I enjoy…”），属于时态和句子结构问题。另有词汇错误：“lefty” 应为“lively”，“city space” 更自然为“city spaces”，以及“modern night feel” 语序和词性混乱，改为“the quiet nights feel”。建议补充主语和动词，使用正确词汇并调整语序以符合一般现在时的陈述。

× For example, shooting from low angle makes ordinary building look dramatic, and shooting up from above can show patterns.

✓ For example, shooting from a low angle makes ordinary buildings look dramatic, and shooting from above can show patterns.

原句中“shooting up from above” 使用了不必要的介词短语“up”，造成语义重复或不自然。同时“from low angle” 缺少介词冠词“a”。这是介词使用和搭配问题。建议使用固定搭配“from a low angle”和“from above”。

× For example, shooting from low angle makes ordinary building look dramatic, and shooting up from above can show patterns.

✓ For example, shooting from a low angle makes ordinary buildings look dramatic, and shooting from above can show patterns.

句中“ordinary building” 应为复数“ordinary buildings”，因为说的是一般情况而非特指一栋建筑。注意名词单复数的一致性，尤其在泛指时通常用复数形式。

× For example, shooting from low angle makes ordinary building look dramatic, and shooting up from above can show patterns.

✓ For example, shooting from a low angle makes ordinary buildings look dramatic, and shooting from above can show patterns.

短语“from low angle” 缺少不定冠词“a”，应为“from a low angle”。这是冠词使用错误，需在可数单数名词前加上适当的冠词。建议复习可数名词与冠词搭配规则。

× Well, actually I like the views in my own country because China is very large country and has many, uh, various of sceneries, uh, so you can capture any, umm, landscape.

✓ Well, actually I like the views in my own country because China is a very large country and has many varied/scenic landscapes, so you can capture any landscape.

原句中“very large country” 缺少冠词“a”，属于冠词和数量词使用问题；“many, uh, various of sceneries” 中“various of” 用法错误，且“sceneries” 很少用复数形式，改为“varied/scenic landscapes”。这是量词和词搭配错误。建议使用“many” + 可数复数名词，或用“various” 后直接接可数复数名词（various landscapes）。

× Well, actually I like the views in my own country because China is very large country and has many, uh, various of sceneries, uh, so you can capture any, umm, landscape.

✓ Well, actually I like the views in my own country because China is a very large country and has many varied landscapes, so you can capture any landscape.

“China is very large country” 缺少不定冠词“a”。这是典型的冠词错误。建议在表示职业、身份或普通可数名词前检查是否需要冠词。

× Well, I like views in both urban and rural areas. In the city enjoying photographing tall buildings and dramatic city space because of the lefty atmosphere, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful scenes like rolling fields and modern night feel more relaxing and natural.

✓ Well, I like views in both urban and rural areas. In the city, I enjoy photographing tall buildings and dramatic city spaces because of the lively atmosphere, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful scenes like rolling fields; the quiet nights feel more relaxing and natural.

原句代词/指代不清导致句子结构混乱，如“modern night feel” 中“modern” 与“night” 搭配不当、缺少连接词。这里强调代词和名词短语应明确且与动词搭配一致。建议确保主语、代词和名词短语清楚且一致。

× Well, I like views in both urban and rural areas. In the city enjoying photographing tall buildings and dramatic city space because of the lefty atmosphere, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful scenes like rolling fields and modern night feel more relaxing and natural.

✓ Well, I like views in both urban and rural areas. In the city, I enjoy photographing tall buildings and dramatic city spaces because of the lively atmosphere, while in rural areas I prefer peaceful scenes like rolling fields; the quiet nights feel more relaxing and natural.

原句第二句缺少主语和谓语，且使用了不正确的连词结构，导致句子不完整或碎片化。需要补全主语动词并调整连词或用分号连接两部分。建议写句子时检查每个分句是否有完整的主谓结构。

× Well, actually I like the views in my own country because China is very large country and has many, uh, various of sceneries, uh, so you can capture any, umm, landscape.

✓ Well, actually I like the views in my own country because China is a very large country and has many varied landscapes, so you can capture any landscape.

“sceneries” 一般不用于复数形式，且“various of sceneries” 用法错误。应使用可数复数名词“landscapes” 或不可数名词“scenery”。建议使用“many landscapes” 或“a variety of scenery”。