Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 语法与用词需改进，回答有重复且句子较长。建议使用简洁自然的句子，修正动词形式和冗余表达，并用一两个具体例子来丰富内容。例如将“take pictures of the moments that I would like to remember forever”改为“I like photographing moments I want to remember”并去掉重复的“share”。同时注意句子数量不超过五句，使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like capturing sunsets and city skylines because the colors and silhouettes are memorable. I often photograph special moments with my family and post a few favorite shots on social media to share those memories with friends.

提案: 表达总体清楚但有语法和拼写错误，且部分句子可更自然紧凑。建议修正形容词和动词形式（例如“crowd”应为“crowded”），使用连接词避免断裂，并补充一两句具体比较说明为什么更喜欢乡村景色（例如宁静、自然光）。

例: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and less polluted. For example, in Hong Kong the city is crowded with tall buildings and light pollution, so you can rarely see stars. In contrast, rural areas offer open skies and peaceful landscapes that are great for photography.

提案: 回答表达了偏好但有重复和句子结构问题，且个别短语不自然（如“the night fills in the Victoria Harbour”）。建议用更准确的描述并去掉重复的“also”。可先给出明确立场，再用一两个具体原因或例子，例如夜景和文化差异，最后表明愿意探索其他国家。

例: I prefer views in my own country, especially the nighttime scenery of Victoria Harbour because the lights and skyline are spectacular. However, I'm also curious about views abroad and would like to travel to see different landscapes and cultures when I have the chance.

× I love to taking pictures of the moments that I would like to remember forever.

✓ I love taking pictures of moments that I would like to remember forever.

句中出現不正確的動詞形式搭配。英語中動詞短語 "love" 可接不定式或動名詞，但不能同時出現 "to" 和動名詞 "taking"（即不能寫成 "to taking"）。建議刪去 "to"，改為 "love taking..." 或改為不帶 -ing 的不定式 "love to take..."。另外可刪去多餘的定冠詞和關係詞，使句子更自然。

× For example, I will take pictures of the beautiful views, the moments with my family and friends and also I will post them on the social media to share with each other to share the happiness in this picture.

✓ For example, I will take pictures of beautiful views and moments with my family and friends, and I will also post them on social media to share the happiness in the pictures.

原句中副詞和片語位置混亂（例如 "also" 放置不當），且出現冗贅（"to share with each other to share"）。建議將 "also" 放在主語和謂語之間（"I will also post" 或 "and I will also post"），刪除重複的 "to share"，並將 "the social media" 改為不可數用法 "social media"，使表達更地道。

× because Hong Kong is very crowd and also populated.

✓ because Hong Kong is very crowded and densely populated.

句中存在單複數/形容詞形式錯誤：應使用形容詞 "crowded"（被動意義的形容詞）而非原級名詞 "crowd"。此外搭配可用 "densely populated"（人口稠密）。建議學習形容詞與過去分詞做形容詞的用法區別。

× We got a lot of tall buildings in the urban areas.

✓ We have a lot of tall buildings in urban areas.

口語中使用 "got" 作為存在動詞不太正式，而且與主語一致性表達上應使用正式現在式 "have"。另外 "in the urban areas" 可簡化為 "in urban areas" 或 "in the urban area"，根據上下文選擇單數或複數。一致性的主謂結構應保持現在時態。

× So actually if you look up into the sky, you don't see a lot of stars because of the light pollution.

✓ So actually if you look up at the sky, you won't see many stars because of light pollution.

條件句和時態搭配需要注意：此處是一般現在時表習慣或普遍事實，可用 "if you look up... you won't see..." 表示結果。原句用 "don't see" 雖可接受，但在此情境下用未來推論 "won't see" 更自然。另 "look up into the sky" 搭配不當，常用 "look up at the sky"；"a lot of stars" 可改為不可數搭配 "many stars" 或直接 "lots of stars"。

× That's why rural areas is a better choice.

✓ That's why rural areas are a better choice.

主語 "rural areas" 為複數，謂語動詞應使用複數形式 "are" 而非單數 "is"。請注意主謂數的一致性。

× I do love the views in my country, especially at the night time because the night fills in the Victoria Harbour as one of the most famous in the world.

✓ I do love the views in my country, especially at night because Victoria Harbour is one of the most famous in the world.

句中時態整體為現在時，需簡化冗贅並修正不自然的片語。"at the night time" 不自然，通常說 "at night"。原句 "the night fills in the Victoria Harbour" 結構錯誤，應改為主語 "Victoria Harbour is one of the most famous..."。保持主謂結構和時態一致。

× But I also I'm also curious about the views in other countries and I would like to give myself a chance to go on and have a look.

✓ But I'm also curious about the views in other countries, and I would like to give myself a chance to go and have a look.

原句出現重複（"But I also I'm also"），代詞與助動詞重複使用造成冗餘。建議刪去多餘的 "also" 或多餘的主語，簡化為 "But I'm also curious..."。另外 "go on and have a look" 中的 "on" 多餘，應為 "go and have a look" 或更自然地 "go and take a look"。