Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and small grammar mistakes (e.g., singular/plural, tense), and add one specific detail using a linking word. Keep answers under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially natural landscapes. For example, last year I photographed a sunrise at the beach, which had vivid colours and calm water, so I felt peaceful looking at the pictures later.

提案: Clarify your preference and give accurate reasons with linking words; avoid contradictions (you said urban but cited 'natural scenery' and 'not crowded', which usually describe rural areas). Correct grammar (possessive pronoun agreement) and remove fillers like 'umm'.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer more natural scenery and fewer crowds. For instance, when I visit the countryside I can enjoy quiet walking trails and clear skies, so I find it more relaxing than busy city streets.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and an example; fix grammar (singular/plural and article use) and finish your thought—don't leave the sentence incomplete. Use linking words to balance two ideas (preference vs interest in travel).

例: I prefer views in my own country because the Philippines has many islands and vibrant festivals that I know well. However, I would also like to visit other countries, for example Japan, to see its different landscapes and cultural events.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views like nature.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, such as nature.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'like nature' is better expressed as 'such as nature' when giving an example. Use a comma before the example for clarity. Suggestion: use 'such as' when listing examples.

× Sometimes I take picture of myself, of my family when we had celebrations or sometimes when I'm with my friends I love to take pictures.

✓ Sometimes I take pictures of myself and my family when we have celebrations, and sometimes when I'm with my friends I love to take pictures.

'Picture' should be plural ('pictures') when referring to multiple photos. Also maintain consistent tense: use present tense 'we have' instead of past 'we had' to match the general habit. Add conjunctions and commas to separate ideas. Suggestion: use plural nouns for repeated actions and keep habitual actions in present tense.

× I prefer views in urban areas because of its natural scenery.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because of their natural scenery.

The pronoun 'its' refers to a singular noun, but 'urban areas' is plural, so use 'their'. Ensure pronoun number agrees with the noun. Suggestion: check plural nouns and match pronouns accordingly.

× It's more relaxing, umm not crowded and also is is more relaxing than in rural areas.

✓ They are more relaxing and less crowded than rural areas.

The sentence repeats 'is' ('is is') and has awkward structure. 'Urban areas' should be referred to with plural verb 'are'. Use comparative structure 'more... than' or 'less... than' correctly: 'more relaxing and less crowded than rural areas.' Suggestion: avoid fillers and ensure subject-verb agreement and parallel structure.

× Of course, I prefer views in my own countries.

✓ Of course, I prefer views in my own country.

The speaker refers to a single country (their home), so 'country' should be singular. Using plural 'countries' contradicts 'my own'. Suggestion: use singular 'country' when referring to one's home nation.

× Philippines is known for variety of islands, festive cultures and beautiful natural resources.

✓ The Philippines is known for a variety of islands, festive cultures, and beautiful natural resources.

Country names like 'The Philippines' take the definite article 'the'. Also include the indefinite article 'a' before 'variety' and commas in a list. Suggestion: memorize country names that take 'the' and use articles before nouns like 'variety.'

× But then I would also love to explore other countries like.

✓ But I would also love to explore other countries.

The sentence ends with a trailing 'like' that expects an example; remove 'like' if no example follows. Also 'But then' is unnecessary. Suggestion: finish clauses or provide examples after 'like.'