Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify your response. Start with a clear topic sentence saying you enjoy taking photos, then give one or two specific details (when you started, what you observe, how you choose angles). Use linking words (because, so, and) and avoid repetition. Also correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “since I was little” → “since I was a child”). Keep the whole answer to at most 3–4 sentences.

例: I’ve enjoyed taking pictures since I was a child because I like observing details in a scene. For example, I often study the light and composition first, and then I wait for the right angle before I press the shutter. This helps me capture photos that look balanced and interesting.

提案: Make your preference explicit with one clear sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague words like “vibes” without explaining them. Use linking words (because, for example, so) and correct odd phrasing. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and the lively atmosphere. For example, I like to study a building’s shape and lighting before photographing it, and I often wait for reflections in nearby water to create more interesting compositions.

提案: Give a direct answer first (own country or other countries), then explain with specific reasons. Fix unclear words and grammar (e.g., “Fuse” unclear; say “other countries” clearly). Mention a concrete contrast between Bali and big cities and why you prefer cityscapes. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” and “for example.”

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy large cityscapes and distinctive skyscrapers. For example, since I live in Bali where tall buildings are restricted, I like visiting big towns abroad to photograph interesting modern architecture and busy streets.

× Personally I like to take pictures since I was little like I like and then I would like to observe the few 1st and then I took the picture in a perfect angle.

✓ Personally, I have liked taking pictures since I was little; I like to observe the view first and then take the picture at a good angle.

The sentence mixes present simple and past simple incorrectly when expressing a situation that began in the past and continues now. Use present perfect ('have liked') to show continuous state from the past to present. Also verb tense and word choice were inconsistent ('observe the few 1st' unclear; replaced with 'observe the view first') and 'took' should be 'take' to match the habitual action. Improve clarity by using semicolon and simpler structure.

× In my opinion, I prefer views in urban areas because it just gives me vibes that I personally love.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer views in urban areas because they just give me vibes that I personally love.

The subject 'views' is plural, so verbs and pronouns must be plural ('give' not 'gives', 'they' not 'it'). This is a subject-verb agreement tied to present tense; correct plural agreement improves grammatical accuracy.

× Absolutely and I usually take a moment to study like the past of the place and I take the photo when like the lake is nice.

✓ I usually take a moment to study the history of the place, and I take the photo when the light on the lake is good.

The original has filler words ('like') and unclear phrases ('study like the past of the place'). This is a sentence structure and word choice problem. Replacing 'study the past of the place' with 'study the history of the place' and clarifying 'when the light on the lake is good' makes the sentence grammatical and coherent.

× I prefer Fuse and other country because I just enjoy the city view, but because I live in Bali I can't enjoy fears like with a big town because we are not allowed to have a tall building.

✓ I prefer foreign countries because I enjoy city views, but since I live in Bali I can't enjoy views of large cities because we are not allowed to have tall buildings.

Multiple problems: 'Fuse' seems incorrect and was replaced with 'foreign countries'; tense and number issues ('city view' -> 'city views'; 'fears' -> 'views of large cities'; 'a tall building' -> 'tall buildings'). This is primarily present tense and pluralization problems, plus word choice. Ensure noun plurality matches context and use clear vocabulary.

× And yeah, I love interesting buildings.

✓ I love interesting buildings.

Starting with 'And yeah' is informal filler; grammatically the sentence is fine in present tense. Removing the filler makes it more appropriate for a test response while keeping the correct present tense usage.