Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (article use, verb forms) and avoid asking irrelevant questions at the end.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit a new city I usually photograph landmarks and street scenes so I can remember where I went and what I did. I also keep these pictures in albums to look back on later.

提案: Expand the answer with a brief reason and one specific example using a linking word (because, for example). Keep it to two or three sentences to meet the natural and effective rule.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and variety of architecture. For example, I like photographing busy streets and modern buildings that show the city's character.

提案: Organize the response: give a clear topic sentence that answers directly, then explain briefly with specific reasons and examples. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition, and correct grammar (word order, nouns). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: I prefer both views in my own country and in other countries. In my country I like photographing familiar cultural scenes because they feel meaningful to me, and abroad I enjoy exploring different landscapes and architectures, for example ancient streets or coastal towns.

× Yes, I love taking pictures of different different views.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views.

The sentence repeats the word 'different' twice which is a lexical/repetition error; not allowed by list but it's best treated as simple redundancy. Remove the duplicate to make the sentence natural.'

× Like if I visit a new place, I would like to take a pictures for memories that that I've been there before so that I can remember what are the things I do there.

✓ If I visit a new place, I would like to take pictures as memories so that I can remember what I did there.

Multiple issues matched to listed types: 'a pictures' uses incorrect article with plural (Article errors, ID 22) and tense/structure problems. Correction removes unnecessary 'like', fixes article to no article before plural 'pictures', changes 'for memories' to 'as memories' for natural collocation, replaces 'that that I've been there before' with 'so that I can remember' and adjusts verb tense to past 'did' to refer to completed actions at the visit. Suggestions: avoid redundant words, use correct article for countable nouns (no 'a' with plural), and choose appropriate tense for events that happened during the visit.

× Where did I go?

✓ Where did I go?

This sentence appears as an interjection by the speaker but is grammatically correct as a past-question form. No change required. Keep usage of past simple question 'Where did I go?' if speaker is asking themselves to recall a past event.'

× I prefer views in urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas.

This sentence is grammatically correct in the simple present to express a general preference. No correction needed.'

× Both I prefer views in my own country and in other countries because I want to see here in our country.

✓ I prefer both views in my own country and in other countries because I want to see places in my country.

Original word order 'Both I prefer...' is awkward (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). 'See here in our country' is unclear. Correction reorders to natural English: 'I prefer both...because I want to see places in my country.' Suggest using 'places' or 'scenery' and place adverbs correctly.

× I want to see the other people, the beautiful here, the beautiful senior here.

✓ I want to see other people and the beautiful scenery here.

The phrase 'the beautiful here, the beautiful senior here' is ungrammatical and confusing. This is an incorrect use of nouns/pronouns and vocabulary (ID 12). Likely intended 'beautiful scenery' not 'senior'. Correction replaces with 'the beautiful scenery here' and joins with 'other people' using 'and'. Suggest choosing correct noun collocations and avoid unintended words like 'senior.'

× But I also want to explore the other views in other countries.

✓ But I also want to explore views in other countries.

The sentence is mostly correct but 'the other views in other countries' is repetitive ('other' twice). Remove the first 'the' and one 'other' to be concise. Use 'explore views in other countries.'

× When, if.

✓ (Remove fragment)

This final fragment 'When, if.' is an incomplete sentence (Sentence structure errors, ID 26). It's a sentence without a verb and lacks context. Suggest removing it or completing it with a full clause such as 'If I have the chance, I will travel.'