Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意図が伝わるが、文法ミス、冗長さ、語彙の繰り返しが目立ちます。具体的には時制の一致（過去/現在）、冠詞の誤り（a picture）、動詞の形（taking→take・I always take pictures）、および冗長なフレーズ（repeating “taking picture”）を直して、簡潔で自然な一文＋補助文にまとめると良いです。例を加えて具体性を増やし、接続詞（because・so）を使って論理的につなげてください。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel, I always take photos to keep the memories, because photos help me remember places and share them with friends.

提案: 内容は具体的だが、文法と語順の誤り、形容詞の過剰使用、冗長な句が見られます。冠詞の使い方（a rural area / the rice fields）、単数・複数の一致（rice fields）、形容詞の適切な配置、そして“calm it down”は不自然なので“calm down”や“feel calm”に修正してください。接続詞（so / because / which）を使って理由を明確に述べ、1〜2の具体例（音、色、空気）を加えると説得力が増します。

例: I prefer rural areas because the rice fields are very beautiful and look like a green carpet. It is also quiet there, so I can relax and enjoy the fresh air.

提案: 答えは明確だが、文法ミスと不自然な語順が多いです。例えば“learned I the French history was the is the most interesting history”は意味が不明瞭なので、“I studied French history and found it very interesting”のように簡潔に。理由を述べる際は時制（studied / was）を正しくし、なぜさらに学びたいか（art, culture, architectureなど）具体的な理由を加えてください。接続詞（because / so）で文をつなげると自然です。

例: I prefer views in other countries, especially France. I studied French history in high school and found it fascinating, so I want to visit France to see its historical sites and learn more about its culture.

× Yes, I like taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'picture' should be plural because 'different views' implies multiple photos. Use plural to match the idea of more than one item: 'pictures'.

× Umm when I when I went to travelling I always taking a picture, taking picture, the taking a picture and the memory memorize it.

✓ When I went travelling, I always took pictures to remember the moment.

Mixed and incorrect verb forms: 'went to travelling' is ungrammatical; use 'went travelling' or 'traveled'. 'always taking' should be past simple 'always took' to match 'went' (past). 'the memory memorize it' is wrong; use 'to remember the moment' or 'to preserve the memory'. Use consistent past tense and correct infinitive structures.

× I prefer in rural area because the site of rice field is so looks so beautiful and awesome and it looks like green carpet and I and this place is so quiet and I can calm it down.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the sight of the rice fields looks so beautiful and like a green carpet, and this place is so quiet that I can feel calm.

Preposition 'in' before 'rural area' is unnecessary; use 'prefer rural areas'. 'site' should be 'sight'. 'rice field' should be plural 'rice fields'. 'is so looks so' is redundant; use 'looks so beautiful'. 'I can calm it down' is incorrect use of 'calm' with object; use 'I can feel calm' or 'it calms me'.

× I prefer views in other countries, especially in France.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially in France.

Sentence is correct regarding singular/plural. No change needed.

× When I was a high school student I learned I the French history was the is the most interesting history.

✓ When I was a high school student, I learned that French history was the most interesting.

Redundant and incorrect verbs: 'learned I the' is wrong and 'was the is the' repeats tenses. Use past tense 'learned' with a that-clause and past 'was' to match the past time reference.

× Also I so I want to learn it more.

✓ Also, I want to learn more about it.

Unnecessary filler 'so I' should be removed. Use simple present 'want' to express present desire. Place 'more' before 'about it' for natural word order.