Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体自然，表达意图清晰，但存在语法错误、冗长结构和细节不足的问题。建议： 1) 修正语法与单数/复数：将 “go travelling to other city or countries” 改为 “travel to other cities or countries”。 2) 精简句子并使用清晰的主题句，例如先一句直接回答喜欢与否，再用一到两句具体细节支持。避免情绪化重复（“capture the moment that I was happy” 可改为更自然的表达）。 3) 增加具体细节并用连接词使逻辑更连贯，例如说明常用什么设备、拍什么主题、拍照的频率或拍照的目的。

例: Yes, I do. I often travel to other cities or countries in my free time, and I like to take photos to remember special moments. For example, I usually use my phone to photograph landscapes and local street scenes when I visit new places, because they help me recall the atmosphere and colors of each location.

提案: 回答展示了个人偏好并表达对两种景观的感受，但语音填充词过多、语法与词汇需改进。建议： 1) 删除填充词（umm, uh），保持流畅。 2) 使用更地道的搭配和复数形式，例如 “the countryside” 而非 “in countryside”，以及用 “the energy of cities”。 3) 提供一两个具体例子或比较，使用连接词（however, while）增强对比性。

例: It depends on my mood. While I enjoy the energy of cities with their busy streets and tall buildings, I often prefer the peaceful countryside when I want to relax and enjoy nature, such as walking along quiet trails or watching fields of green.

提案: 回答不够自然且逻辑不清：提到 “different salary” 与景观喜好无直接关系，且语法错误明显。建议： 1) 删除与工资无关的内容，改为聚焦文化、风景或氛围的差异。 2) 用清晰的原因支持偏好，例如提到建筑风格、自然景观或文化体验，并使用连接词（because, so）使原因更连贯。 3) 注意语法，使用完整且简洁的句子，避免冗长或不相关的信息。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer very different architecture and natural scenery that I haven't seen before. For instance, visiting a foreign city lets me experience unique cultural landmarks and street life, which makes my travels more exciting and memorable.

× In my free time I often go travelling to other city or countries and I like to take photos to capture the moment that I was happy.

✓ In my free time I often travel to other cities or countries and I like to take photos to capture moments when I am happy.

句子中时态与一般现在时使用不当：‘go travelling’可以简化为常用的一般现在时动词短语‘travel’；名词复数与数量搭配错误（参见复数问题），应为‘cities’或‘countries’；‘the moment that I was happy’ 使用了过去时‘was’，而描述习惯性或在拍照时的情感应使用一般现在或现在进行，且表达更自然为‘moments when I am happy’。建议：用一般现在时描述习惯性动作，使用复数形式与更自然的从句连接词。

× For example, I enjoy photographing landscapes with my phone.

✓ For example, I enjoy photographing landscapes with my phone.

句子原文语法正确，‘with my phone’是正确的工具介词短语，用以表示使用工具拍摄，因此无需修改。仅标注为符合列表中介词使用（无误）。

× Umm, it depends on my mood. Sometimes I like the feeling of energy like the cities, but sometimes I prefer, uh, the relaxing feeling in countryside.

✓ Umm, it depends on my mood. Sometimes I like the energetic feeling of cities, but sometimes I prefer the relaxing feeling in the countryside.

问题包括词类与时态搭配不当：‘the feeling of energy like the cities’ 词序和表达不自然，应改为‘the energetic feeling of cities’；‘in countryside’ 缺少定冠词，正确为‘in the countryside’。整体时态为一般现在，保持不变。建议：把形容词放在名词前修饰，注意与固定搭配‘in the countryside’。

× I prefer views in other countries because in other countries there have different salary from my country and that definitely will be a different feeling and I can enjoy different cultures.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because other countries have different salaries from my country, and that definitely gives a different feeling and lets me enjoy different cultures.

原句存在介词和结构问题：‘in other countries there have different salary from my country’ 中‘there have’是不正确的存在结构，用法错误且‘sallery’拼写与单复数不当；应改为主语+谓语结构‘other countries have different salaries’并用复数‘salaries’表示不同的收入水平；‘from my country’位置正确但可接在‘salaries’后。其次，‘that definitely will be a different feeling’ 更自然的表达是‘that definitely gives a different feeling’或‘that definitely feels different’以匹配主语。最后增加‘lets me’更自然表达‘我能享受不同文化’。建议：使用正常主谓结构代替错误的存在句，注意名词单复数与动词一致，并用更自然的动词表达感受和结果。