Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğal ve olumlu bir başlangıç yapıyor ancak birkaç dilbilgisi hatası ve anlamsal belirsizlik var. "landscapes" ile çoğul kullanım uygun, fakat "a text of my attention" ifadesi anlamsız; muhtemelen "a test of my attention" ya da "a way to focus my attention" demek istedi. Cümle yapısını daha akıcı ve özlü hale getirin (maksimum 3-4 cümle). Ayrıca bağlayıcı bir ifade ekleyerek neden sevdiğinizi kısaca belirtin (ör. "because it helps me notice details").

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of landscapes because photography helps me notice small details in nature. I enjoy framing scenes and experimenting with light to capture different moods.

提案: Cevapta dilbilgisi hataları ("to taking" yerine "taking" veya "to take") ve anlamsal çelişki var: şehir manzaralarını tercih ederken onları "really natural beauty" olarak nitelendiriyorsunuz — bu ifadeyi daha uygun kelimelerle düzeltin (ör. "interesting" veya "vibrant"). Ayrıca nedenini açık ve özgül örnekle destekleyin (ör. mimari detaylar, sokak yaşamı). Bağlaç kullanarak cümleleri birbirine bağlayın (ör. "because" ve "also").

例: I prefer taking photos in urban areas because the architecture and street life create interesting compositions. For example, I often capture contrasts between old buildings and modern shops to show the city's character.

提案: Cevap bir tercih belirtiyor ancak ifadeler tekrarlı ve belirsiz ("too much richness" ve "About this unique landscape" anlamsal olarak zayıf). Daha net bir konu cümlesi kurun: önce tercihinizi açıkça söyleyin, sonra birkaç spesifik neden verin (ör. çeşitlilik, kolay erişim, kültürel bağlantı). Gereksiz dolgu kelimelerinden ("uh", "actually") kaçının ve cümleleri 2-3 destekleyici cümleyle sınırlandırın.

例: I generally prefer photographing landscapes in my own country because there is a great variety of scenery and it's easier to travel to those locations. For instance, I can visit coastal cliffs one weekend and mountainous areas the next, which gives me diverse subjects to photograph.

× Of course, I love taking pictures of the landscapes. It's really a text of my attention.

✓ Of course, I love taking pictures of landscapes. They really catch my attention.

The phrase 'the landscapes' incorrectly uses the definite article; 'landscapes' in general needs no article (Grammar Problem Type 22). 'It's really a text of my attention' is unidiomatic and incorrect; the intended meaning is 'they catch my attention' which uses the correct verb and plural subject-agreement. Suggestion: remove 'the' before plural general nouns and use idiomatic verbs like 'catch attention'. (Errors involve article use and incorrect adjective/adverb/phrase selection.)

× I prefer to taking urban areas pictures because they are really natural beauty and they are unique.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of urban areas because they are really beautiful and unique.

After 'prefer' the correct structure is either 'prefer to do' or 'prefer doing'. 'Prefer to taking' mixes both, so it should be 'prefer taking' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Also 'urban areas pictures' has wrong word order; use 'pictures of urban areas'. 'They are really natural beauty' is ungrammatical; use adjective 'beautiful'. Suggestions: choose one verb pattern (prefer doing or prefer to do) and use correct noun phrases and adjectives.

× Also I really love to focus the picture.

✓ Also, I really like to focus on the picture.

The verb 'focus' requires the preposition 'on' when indicating what receives focus ('focus on the picture') (Grammar Problem Type 11) and 'love to focus' is acceptable but 'like to focus on' is more natural here. Suggestion: include the correct preposition 'on' and consider 'like' vs 'love' for register consistency.

× It doesn't matter for me, uh, if you are talking about natural beauty actually, but I prefer my country's landscapes, uh, because there is too much richness.

✓ It doesn't matter to me when talking about natural beauty, but I prefer my country's landscapes because they are very rich.

Use 'matter to me' not 'matter for me' for this expression (Grammar Problem Type 12/11). 'If you are talking about' is wordy and mismatches register; use 'when talking about' or 'regarding'. 'There is too much richness' is awkward and possibly misleading; 'they are very rich' or 'they have a lot of variety' is clearer. Also ensure plural agreement ('landscapes... they are'). Suggestion: use 'matter to me', simplify the clause, and match plurality.

× About this unique landscape.

✓ I also enjoy the unique landscapes in my country.

The fragment 'About this unique landscape.' is not a complete sentence (Grammar Problem Type 23/26). It should be integrated into a full sentence that matches the previous idea. Suggestion: combine fragments into complete sentences and ensure subject and verb are present.