Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and grammatically correct by giving a clear topic sentence, one or two specific supporting details, and linking words. Avoid repetition and correct tense and article errors. For example, say why you enjoy photography (personal reason), mention a specific situation or subject you like to photograph, and finish with a concise concluding sentence.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos because I love sharing my travel experiences online. For instance, when I travel I usually photograph landscapes and local scenes to post on Instagram or Facebook. As a result, I rarely miss a chance to take pictures.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to add specific supporting details. Correct grammar (countable nouns, articles, and phrasing) and avoid vague statements. Name concrete examples of rural scenes you like and briefly explain why urban views are less appealing.

例: I prefer rural views because I love natural landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains, rivers and the ocean because their colours and textures are more striking. In contrast, urban scenes feel less interesting to me because they are often crowded and less peaceful.

提案: Answer directly with correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference, then give a specific example with accurate descriptions and reasons. Avoid unclear words like 'wheel' and check tense and article usage. Provide one concise concluding remark.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy seeing landscapes that are different from those at home. For example, when I visited New Zealand the scenery was breathtaking — dramatic mountains and clear coastlines unlike anything I've seen in Thailand. That trip made me appreciate travelling for unique natural views.

× I'm a big fan of taking pictures the reason is I love posting photos online either on Instagram or Facebook.

✓ I'm a big fan of taking pictures because I love posting photos online, either on Instagram or Facebook.

Run-on sentence and missing conjunction. The original joins two independent clauses without a conjunction or proper punctuation. Use 'because' to connect the reason clause and add a comma before the parenthetical 'either' for clarity.

× So whenever I went travelling I wouldn't miss a chance to take photos.

✓ So whenever I travel I don't miss a chance to take photos.

Tense inconsistency. The question is about general habits, which require the present simple. 'Went' and 'wouldn't miss' imply past habits; change to 'travel' and 'don't miss' to express habitual action in the present.

× I.

✓ (Remove isolated 'I' or complete the sentence, e.g. 'I really enjoy it.')

Incomplete sentence/fragments. A single letter 'I' is a fragment and does not form a complete thought. Either remove it or complete the sentence to convey the intended meaning.

× I personally love the rural areas.

✓ I personally love rural areas.

Unnecessary definite article. When speaking generally about rural areas as a category, omit 'the'. Use 'the' only for specific rural areas.

× I would say taking photo of natural landscape like mountain, river or the ocean is my go to.

✓ I would say taking photos of natural landscapes like mountains, rivers, or the ocean is my go-to.

Multiple issues: plural nouns needed for general categories ('photos', 'landscapes', 'mountains', 'rivers'), and hyphenation for compound modifier 'go-to'. Also 'taking photos of' is the correct -ing construction for the activity.

× To take photo of urban.

✓ Taking photos of urban scenes.

Fragment and incorrect noun form. 'To take photo of urban' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use a gerund phrase 'Taking photos of urban scenes' to match the previous sentence's structure.

× In my perspective it's not thing interesting.

✓ From my perspective, it's not very interesting.

Word order and missing article. Use the prepositional phrase 'From my perspective' (or 'In my opinion'), include 'very' or 'particularly' for degree, and use 'interesting' as an adjective; 'not thing interesting' is ungrammatical.

× I prefer will in another countries.

✓ I prefer being in other countries.

Incorrect word order and modal use. 'Prefer will in another countries' is ungrammatical. Use 'prefer' + -ing or 'prefer to be in'. Also 'another countries' should be 'other countries' (plural form).

× I will says it's New Zealand that I went to travel and the wheel is just unreal, is very beautiful landscape they have and nothing in Thailand could compare to the wheel.

✓ I would say it's New Zealand that I traveled to; the scenery there is just unreal. They have very beautiful landscapes, and nothing in Thailand could compare.

Multiple errors combined: 'will says' is incorrect for reporting opinion—use 'would say' or 'would argue'; 'went to travel' should be 'traveled to' (past tense), subject-verb omissions ('is very beautiful landscape they have' is ungrammatical) and plurality ('landscapes'). Also break into clearer sentences and use appropriate tense and subject-verb agreement.