Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь избегать слов-паразитов (например, "uh", "like") и излишней говорливости. Дайте более структурированный ответ: короткое обобщение, затем одно-две конкретные детали. Уточните, какие именно виды вы фотографируете и почему они для вас важны, используя связки (for example, because, so) и разнообразную лексику вместо повторов (например, вместо "keep these special memories" можно сказать "preserve memories").

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, on a recent trip to Paris I photographed historic streets and landmarks to remember the atmosphere and architecture.

提案: Уберите заполнители речи ("umm") и завершайте мысль полно. Начните с ясного утверждения, затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Используйте связующие слова (because, since, for instance) и более точную лексику (e.g., "familiar", "vibrant").

例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in a town and feel more comfortable there. For instance, I enjoy the vibrant streets and nearby cafes, which feel familiar and lively compared with quiet countryside scenes.

提案: Сформулируйте мысль более чётко и следите за согласованием слов (например, "architecture" вместо "architect"). Дайте одно-два конкретных сравнительных пункта и используйте связки (however, because, for example). Избегайте фраз типа "the Ukrainian ones" без артикля и контекста.

例: I would prefer views in other countries, such as Paris, because of its historic architecture and tree-lined avenues. For example, Parisian street life and café culture feel more picturesque to me than typical Ukrainian cityscapes.

× Yes, I absolutely love taking pictures because it helps me to keep these special memories for years.

✓ Yes, I absolutely love taking pictures because they help me keep these special memories for years.

The subject 'taking pictures' refers to 'pictures' as a plural idea; 'helps' is singular and incorrectly agrees with 'taking pictures'. Using 'they help me keep' matches the plural sense and removes the unnecessary 'to' after 'help'. Suggestion: use plural verbs to match plural subjects and omit 'to' after 'help'.

× Uh, for example, I went on the trip to Paris recently and I photographed like literally every street and famous landmarks so I can look back on this.

✓ For example, I went on a trip to Paris recently and I photographed nearly every street and famous landmark so I can look back on them.

Use 'a trip' (article correction but covered here for clarity) and 'landmark' should be singular when preceded by 'every'. 'Every' requires a singular noun: 'every famous landmark'. Also 'like literally' is informal; 'nearly' or 'almost' is clearer. Finally, pronoun 'them' refers back to plural 'streets and landmarks'. Suggestion: use 'every' + singular noun and match pronouns to plural antecedents.

× Umm I definitely prefer urban areas to rural areas because I was born and raised in the town so urban areas are more common for me and I feel more comfortable in the town where umm.

✓ Umm, I definitely prefer urban areas to rural ones because I was born and raised in a town, so urban areas are more familiar to me and I feel more comfortable there.

Use 'rural ones' to avoid repetition. 'Born and raised in the town' is unnatural unless a specific town is meant; 'in a town' is more general. 'More common for me' should be 'more familiar to me'. Use 'there' to refer back to the town. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use 'there' for places, and choose 'a' vs 'the' appropriately.

× Unfortunately I haven't traveled to many foreign countries, but I visited Paris recently and I just fell in love with this city, the atmosphere, the architect to the street life.

✓ Unfortunately, I haven't traveled to many foreign countries, but I visited Paris recently and I just fell in love with the city, its atmosphere, architecture, and street life.

Parallel list items need consistent forms: 'architecture' (noun) rather than 'the architect'. Use 'its' to show possession. Commas separate list items. Tense 'haven't traveled' (present perfect) is fine with general experience; 'visited Paris recently' (simple past) is correct. Suggestion: keep parallel noun forms in lists and use possessive pronouns for clarity.

× I would prefer Parisian views of the Ukrainian ones because the historic buildings, tree lined avenues and coffee.

✓ I would prefer Parisian views to Ukrainian ones because of the historic buildings, tree-lined avenues, and cafés.

Use 'prefer A to B' for comparisons. 'Parisian views of the Ukrainian ones' is incorrect structure. Include 'because of' to introduce reasons. Use hyphen 'tree-lined' and correct 'coffee' to 'cafés' or 'coffee culture' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B' and parallel, complete noun phrases after 'because of'.