Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời tự nhiên, rõ ràng và có ví dụ cụ thể. Để cải thiện điểm số, bạn nên rút ngắn một chút để không vượt quá 4-5 câu, tránh lặp ý (ví dụ “remember the scenery” và “share memories” tương đối trùng lặp) và thêm một liên từ để câu nối mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra hãy dùng từ vựng cụ thể hơn về màu sắc hoặc cảm giác thay vì từ chung chung như “colors and atmosphere”.

例: Yes, I do. I often take photos when I travel with family or friends because they help me remember beautiful scenes. For instance, I love photographing coastal sunsets, especially the vivid orange and purple hues reflecting on the water, which create a peaceful mood.

提案: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn nhưng bị lặp từ và nhiều tiếng ngập ngừng (umm, uh). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, loại bỏ tiếng ồn, và giải thích ngắn gọn với một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "because of" để liên kết ý. Giữ trong 2-3 câu để tự nhiên hơn.

例: I like both urban and rural views because each offers something different. Urban areas impress me with modern architecture and lively streets, while rural areas are calming with open fields and natural scenery.

提案: Câu trả lời hợp lý nhưng có tiếng ngắt quãng và một chút lặp ý. Hãy tránh ngập ngừng, sửa lỗi từ vựng như "agricultures" (không đếm được) thành "agricultural practices" hoặc "farming techniques", và đưa ra một ví dụ cụ thể về khác biệt để làm rõ quan điểm. Giữ 2-3 câu súc tích.

例: I enjoy scenery both at home and abroad because they offer different charms. For example, I love the familiar beaches and mountains in my country, but abroad I’m fascinated by different farming landscapes and traditional rural villages that show unique local ways of life.

× I love taking pictures when I travel with my family or friends because the photos help me remember the scenery clearly and I can post them on social media to share memories.

✓ I love taking pictures when I travel with my family or friends because the photos help me remember the scenery clearly and I can post them on social media to share memories.

No grammatical error found related to prepositions; sentence is correct. No change needed.

× For example, I especially enjoy photographing coastal views and sunsets because of the colors and atmosphere.

✓ For example, I especially enjoy photographing coastal views and sunsets because of their colors and atmosphere.

Use of possessive pronoun 'their' clarifies that 'colors and atmosphere' belong to the coastal views and sunsets. This avoids ambiguity and improves sentence cohesion.

× Actually, I love them both as I think that these areas have their own beautiful things to, umm, explore and, uh, engage, so I cannot choose between those.

✓ Actually, I love them both because I think that these areas each have their own beautiful things to explore and enjoy, so I cannot choose between them.

The original has filler words 'umm' and 'uh' and the verb 'engage' is incorrectly used. Replace with 'enjoy' which fits context. Use 'each have' for clarity and 'them' instead of 'those' to refer back to 'urban areas or rural areas.' Remove fillers for fluency.

× I love both the scenery in my own country and the landscapes of other countries because each place has its own unique charm.

✓ I love both the scenery in my own country and the landscapes of other countries because each place has its own unique charm.

No grammatical error found related to prepositions; sentence is correct. No change needed.

× For example, I enjoy the familiar mountains and beaches at home, but I also appreciate the different agricultures umm I see when I travel abroad.

✓ For example, I enjoy the familiar mountains and beaches at home, but I also appreciate the different agricultural practices I see when I travel abroad.

The noun 'agricultures' is incorrect in English. Use 'agricultural practices' or 'agriculture' as an uncountable noun. Remove filler 'umm' and add a relative pronoun 'that' or use 'I see' for clarity. This corrects word choice and improves grammar.