Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid informal phrases that may sound awkward (e.g. "photographer girl") and keep within 3–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (use "I enjoy" rather than "I just see").

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes and cityscapes to capture memories, and I later organize the photos into albums. This helps me remember places clearly and improves my composition skills.

提案: Answer the question directly first (urban or rural), then give a clear reason and a specific example. Use linking words (because, so, for example) but avoid repeating the idea that you "need to record every scenery." Provide one concise supporting detail about what you like photographing in that setting.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer more natural scenes and varied light. For example, I enjoy photographing fields, rivers and traditional houses, which help me practice composition and using natural light effectively.

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and provide a specific reason and brief example. Avoid vague phrases like "explain more different sceneries." Instead say you want to see new styles, cultures or landscapes. Keep responses clear and under five sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see different landscapes and cultures. For instance, I photographed coastal cliffs in Portugal and traditional villages in Japan, which offered styles and colors I don't often see at home.

× I'd say I'm a photographer girl.

✓ I'd say I'm a girl who likes photography.

The phrase 'photographer girl' is awkward and ungrammatical in English; it incorrectly combines a profession noun with 'girl'. Use a noun phrase or relative clause to describe preference: 'a girl who likes photography' or 'an amateur photographer' depending on intended meaning. This improves naturalness and grammaticality.

× Nowadays I just see taking pictures of different views while traveling is the best way to restore my travel memory.

✓ Nowadays I think that taking pictures of different views while traveling is the best way to preserve my travel memories.

The original uses 'I just see' which is unnatural and 'restore my travel memory' which is incorrect collocation and singular/plural. Use 'think that' to express opinion, 'preserve' instead of 'restore', and plural 'memories'. Reordering the clause yields a clear, grammatical sentence.

× Yeah, sure, because I want to be a photographer, so I need to record every scenery in my life to improve my photography skills.

✓ Yes, because I want to become a photographer, I try to record every scene in my life to improve my photography skills.

Combining 'because' and 'so' is redundant; choose one connector. 'Want to be' can be 'want to become' for clarity. 'Every scenery' is incorrect — use 'every scene' or 'every landscape'. The revised sentence removes redundancy and fixes word choice.

× Taking photos for this is a great way for me.

✓ Taking photos for this is a great way for me to improve.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding an infinitive 'to improve' clarifies purpose. Alternatively, say 'This is a great way for me to improve my skills.' Ensure the verb form matches intended meaning and completes the idea.

× Honestly, for me, I prefer views in other countries because I have visited most of beautiful landscapes in China.

✓ Honestly, I prefer views in other countries because I have visited most of the beautiful landscapes in China.

'For me' is redundant with 'Honestly'; use one. 'Most of beautiful landscapes' is missing 'the' before 'beautiful landscapes' or should be 'most beautiful landscapes.' Use 'most of the beautiful landscapes' or 'most beautiful landscapes' depending on meaning. The correction adds the definite article for grammaticality.

× I prefer to explain more different sceneries and areas.

✓ I prefer to explore more different scenery and regions.

'Explain' is incorrect verb here; likely intended 'explore' or 'see'. 'Sceneries' is uncountable or rarely plural; use 'scenery' or 'scenes'. 'Areas' is better as 'regions' or 'places'. The correction selects appropriate verbs and nouns for natural expression.