Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ตอบไม่ชัดเจน มีข้อผิดพลาดด้านไวยากรณ์และซ้ำซ้อน ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ชัดเจน ระบุเหตุผลอย่างเป็นระบบ ฝึกใช้โครงสร้างประโยคถูกต้องและคำเชื่อมสั้นๆ เช่น because / so that และลดการซ้ำคำ (memorable ซ้ำ)

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because I enjoy preserving memories with my family. For example, my mother and I often take photos at parks and beaches so we can look back on special moments together.

提案: คำตอบคลุมเครือและมีคำพูดไม่เป็นทางการ (gonna) ขาดโครงสร้างชัดเจน ควรตอบตรงๆว่าเลือกแบบไหนเป็นหลัก แล้วใช้ linking words (however / sometimes / on the other hand) พร้อมรายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น ตัวอย่างสถานที่หรือเหตุผลที่ชอบอาคารหรือธรรมชาติ

例: It depends, but I usually prefer rural views because I enjoy peaceful natural scenery. However, sometimes I like urban areas for their impressive architecture and lively atmosphere, especially when I visit city centers with historic buildings.

提案: คำตอบมีความคิดชัดเจนแต่โครงสร้างและไวยากรณ์ยังต้องปรับ (For my opinion → In my opinion; so that → so) ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคตอบตรงๆและตามด้วยเหตุผลเฉพาะ พร้อมตัวอย่างสั้นๆ และหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำ

例: In my opinion, I prefer views in other countries because I want to see landscapes not found at home. For example, I love the fjords in Norway and the snowy mountains there, which you rarely see in tropical countries like mine.

× Of course I really love it because my mom want to take photo to to them because this have the made memorable and also have the great memorable with the family.

✓ Of course, I really love it because my mom wants to take photos of them; this makes great memories and wonderful family moments.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('mom want' -> 'mom wants') and pluralization ('photo' -> 'photos'). Incorrect preposition and phrasing ('take photo to to them' -> 'take photos of them'). Incorrect verb forms and awkward structure ('this have the made memorable and also have the great memorable with the family' -> 'this makes great memories and wonderful family moments'). Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with subjects, use plural for countable nouns when appropriate, use correct prepositions (take photos of), and simplify phrases to clear subject-verb structure.

× I think this is gonna be depend on the geography in this area.

✓ I think this is going to depend on the geography of the area.

Informal contraction 'gonna' should be 'going to' in formal speech. Incorrect verb pattern 'be depend' should be 'depend' as a verb following 'going to'. Incorrect preposition 'in this area' is acceptable but 'of the area' is more natural here. Suggestion: use 'going to depend on' and prefer 'gonna' only in casual speech.

× Sometime I like the building or the urban in the urban area us but sometime I like the nature in the forest or.

✓ Sometimes I like buildings and urban areas, but sometimes I prefer nature, such as forests.

Errors include pluralization ('Sometime' -> 'Sometimes', 'building' -> 'buildings'), redundant or incorrect wording ('the urban in the urban area us' unclear), and incomplete clause ending 'or.' Use parallel structure with 'sometimes... but sometimes...' and correct noun forms. Suggestion: use plural for general likes and provide complete examples ('forests').

× For my opinion, I love the fjord in Norway, so that I love the view in another country because I love the snow and the mountain that in the tropical country does not have.

✓ In my opinion, I love the fjords in Norway, so I prefer views in other countries because I love the snow and mountains that tropical countries do not have.

Problems: incorrect phrase 'For my opinion' should be 'In my opinion'; singular/plural issues ('fjord' -> 'fjords', 'mountain' -> 'mountains'); awkward connector 'so that I love' -> 'so I prefer'; incorrect relative clause order 'that in the tropical country does not have' should be 'that tropical countries do not have'. Also use 'other countries' instead of 'another country' to match plural 'fjords' and 'views'. Suggestion: use 'in my opinion', match singular/plural consistently, and place relative clauses directly after the noun they describe.