Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid redundant phrases and filler words.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph city skylines and beach sunsets to share on my Instagram because they attract more engagement from my followers.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear preference or balanced view. Use linking words (however, whereas, for example) and avoid repeated fillers ('like', 'you'). Give specific images or activities to illustrate your point.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy hiking and capturing natural landscapes. However, I also like urban photography for portraits and architecture; for example, I sometimes dress smartly and photograph city buildings to create a modern look for my profile.

提案: Be direct and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear statement of preference, then support it with two specific details (locations, activities, or reasons). Use smoother linking phrases (for example, therefore).

例: I prefer views in my own country because the areas around Amman offer varied natural scenery, such as wooded valleys and rocky hills. For example, I often visit nearby nature reserves to photograph trails and panoramic vistas, which I find more inspiring than urban scenes.

× Actually, yes, I like to take pictures in different views because I am usually sharing this picture in my social media profiles on Instagram and Facebook.

✓ Actually, yes, I like to take pictures of different views because I usually share these pictures on my social media profiles such as Instagram and Facebook.

The original sentence misuses the continuous form 'am usually sharing' for a habitual action; use simple present 'usually share'. 'In different views' is awkward; use 'of different views'. 'This picture' should be plural 'these pictures' to match the general statement. Use 'on' for social media and 'such as' to list examples. Suggestion: Use simple present for habitual actions and ensure noun number agreement.

× To be honest each of them have like different sense but for urban areas I would like to take pictures with the suit and let's say like to be a gentleman in these pictures.

✓ To be honest, each of them has a different feel, but for urban areas I would like to take pictures wearing a suit and portraying myself as a gentleman in those photos.

'Each' is singular and requires 'has' rather than 'have' (subject-verb agreement). 'Like' is filler and unnecessary; remove it. 'Different sense' is unnatural; use 'a different feel'. 'Take pictures with the suit' should be 'wearing a suit'. 'Let's say like to be' is ungrammatical; use 'portraying myself as'. Use 'those photos' to refer back to urban pictures. Suggestion: Match singular subjects with singular verbs and use natural collocations.

× But like the rural areas I would like to go like in a hiking and take a picture on hiking and if anyone check my Instagram they will see you.

✓ In rural areas I would like to go hiking and take pictures while hiking, and if anyone checks my Instagram they will see them.

Use 'go hiking' not 'go in a hiking'. 'Take a picture on hiking' should be 'take pictures while hiking' or 'take pictures during a hike'. 'If anyone check' needs third-person singular agreement 'checks'. 'They will see you' is incorrect pronoun/reference; use 'they will see them' (the pictures). Also remove filler 'like'. Suggestion: Use correct gerund phrases ('go hiking', 'while hiking') and ensure subject-verb agreement and clear pronoun references.

× Actually, um, in my country there's a lot of beautiful views outside Amman because it's like nature and adventurous views and there's a lot of trees and you can see the nature in a very beautiful way.

✓ Actually, in my country there are many beautiful views outside Amman because of the natural and adventurous scenery; there are many trees and you can see nature in a very beautiful way.

Use 'there are' for plural 'views' (not 'there's'). 'Because it's like nature and adventurous views' is unclear; use 'because of the natural and adventurous scenery'. 'A lot of trees' is fine but 'you can see the nature' should be 'you can see nature' without 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'there are' for plural subjects, choose clearer prepositions ('because of'), and avoid unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns.

× So I usually, I usually like go outside the city to see it and take pictures there.

✓ So I usually like to go outside the city to see it and take pictures there.

Omit the repeated 'I usually'. Use the infinitive 'like to go' rather than the bare form 'like go'. The rest is fine. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and use correct verb forms after 'like' (like to do something).