Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 总体表达清楚，但需改进句子结构和用词准确性，避免重复和语法错误。建议用一至两句主题句直接回答，再用一到两句具体细节支持，并使用连接词（例如: for example, when, so）使逻辑更连贯。注意时态和名词单复数（e.g., broad sky 而不是 broaden sky，memories → remember）。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views, especially when I travel. For example, when I visit mountains I like to capture the wide grasslands and the broad sky, while at the seaside I focus on the water and sandy beaches. I find photos are a great way to remember the scenery.

提案: 内容有明确偏好但表达重复且存在语法和词汇错误。建议用一到两句直接给出偏好理由，随后用具体细节比较城市与乡村的不同。避免重复词汇（e.g., “by contrast”, “street lights”），注意形容词比较级和不可数名词（e.g., ‘quieter’ 正确，但不要加 more）。

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the city skyline, especially at night when skyscrapers and streetlights create beautiful scenes. In contrast, the countryside is quieter and more peaceful, but I find it less exciting visually.

提案: 回答观点明确但句子不够流畅，有语法和连贯性问题。建议先说偏好并给出一至两个具体原因，用连接词改进衔接，修正形容词和动词形式（e.g., ‘varied’ 而不是 ‘varies’，‘which makes’），并在最后简短表示对国外风景的兴趣。

例: I prefer the views in my own country because it has a long, rich history and very varied scenery. For example, you can find mountains, the sea and modern urban skylines within a short distance, which makes the landscapes more interesting and meaningful to me. However, I also look forward to visiting scenic places abroad.

× I also like taking pictures of different views, especially when I have any travels.

✓ I also like taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel.

句中不需要搭配任何（any）與travels的複數形式。英語中常用when I travel來表達“當我旅行時”。此外 travel 作動詞時不加s（第一人稱現在式）。建議去掉 any 和複數形式，使用簡單現在時表達習慣性動作。

× For example, when I travel near a mountain, I will take the wide grass and broaden sky, and the travel to the sea I will take the water and the sand.

✓ For example, when I travel near a mountain, I will photograph the wide grass and broad sky, and when I travel to the sea I will photograph the water and the sand.

原句中有多處詞性與冠詞使用不當：1) 用 take pictures 或 photograph 比較自然，這裡選用 photograph。2) wide 用於 grass 可以，但 broad 應為 broad（形容詞）而非 broaden（動詞變形）。3) 第二部分缺少連接詞 when 且 travel 前不需加 the。建議使用 when 引導的從句並修正形容詞形式。

× So I think it's a good way to memorize the scenery.

✓ So I think it's a good way to remember the scenery.

英文中通常用 remember 而非 memorize 用於記住景色（memorize 更常用於刻意記憶信息）。另外 keep 原句結構可以，但用 remember 更自然。建議用常見搭配 remember the scenery。

× I prefer using urban areas because I like the skyline, especially the sky.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I like the skyline, especially the sky.

prefer 後面通常直接接名詞或動名詞（如 prefer doing sth），但這裡說偏好某類地區時直接用 prefer urban areas 更自然。使用 using urban areas 語法上不錯但不符合語境，顯得不必要。建議省略 using。

× Skyscrapers are beautifully lit and the street lights as the street lights are showing in in front of my view.

✓ Skyscrapers are beautifully lit, and the street lights are in front of my view.

原句有重複（the street lights as the street lights）和多餘的動詞短語（are showing in in front of my view）。應刪去重複並用簡潔的表述。美化照明用 beautifully lit 是正確的形容詞短語。建議刪除冗餘詞並保持簡潔。

× By by contrast, the countryside is more quieter and kind of boring.

✓ By contrast, the countryside is quieter and kind of boring.

存在重複（By by）和冗餘比較詞（more quieter）。比較級 quieter 已包含比較意義，不能與 more 一起使用。修正為 quieter。

× I prefer the views in my own country because it has a long rich history so the scenery is very varies.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because it has a long, rich history, so the scenery is very varied.

varies 是動詞形式，應使用形容詞 varied 來形容 scenery。另外 rich history 前加逗號或連詞以分隔形容詞更清晰。建議用 varied 描述多樣的景色。

× So for example you can see the mountains, the sea, the modern urban skylines all within a short distance.

✓ For example, you can see the mountains, the sea, and modern urban skylines all within a short distance.

原句中開頭的 So for example 顯得多餘，並且列舉項目之間缺少連詞 and。建議去掉多餘的 so，並在列舉最後加 and 以符合英語並列結構。

× So which make the landscapes a more interesting and meaningful for me.

✓ So which makes the landscapes more interesting and meaningful for me.

原句存在主謂不一致與冗餘：which 作關係代詞指前句，應用單數動詞 makes；此外 a more interesting and meaningful 中的 a 與 more 不搭配，且 meaningful 不需要前置 a。修正為 makes 並刪除多餘的 a。

× But also look forward to visit other country sceneries.

✓ But I also look forward to visiting scenery in other countries.

缺少主語 I；短語 look forward to 後面必須接動名詞（visiting），不能接不定式（to visit）。country sceneries 用法不自然，建議改為 scenery in other countries。中文建議：在 look forward to 之後用動名詞，並用複數 countries 表示其他國家。