Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms (e.g., "I quite love" -> "I really love" or "I quite enjoy"), avoid filler words ("Umm"), and correct word choice ("shave the memory" -> "save memories"). Keep the answer concise (1–3 sentences) and include one brief specific example to show variety. Use linking phrase if adding detail (e.g., "for example").

例: I really enjoy taking photos of anything that catches my attention. For example, I often photograph candid moments with friends and family to save those memories.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and more natural: use plural/singular correctly ("urban areas"), avoid awkward phrases ("attract my attention to much" -> "attract me a lot"). Combine ideas with linking words (e.g., "because", "so") and give one concise reason or short example. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I like the modern architecture and lively atmosphere. For instance, I enjoy photographing tall buildings and busy streets when I hang out with friends.

提案: Focus and simplify your answer: correct grammar and word choice ("it has rich beaches and mountains"), avoid confusing words ("hilarious" and "artist thing" are incorrect here). Give a clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and keep to 1–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country, Vietnam, because it has beautiful beaches and dramatic mountains. For example, I love visiting the coastal towns and photographing the sunsets over the sea.

× Yes, I'm quite love taking pictures of everything that are attractive to my attention.

✓ Yes, I quite love taking pictures of everything that is attractive to my attention.

The original uses 'I'm quite love' which mixes present continuous with a stative verb; correct is 'I quite love' (present simple) or 'I really love.' 'Everything' is singular, so the relative clause needs singular verb 'is' rather than 'are.' Suggestion: use 'I really love' or 'I quite love' and match verb number with 'everything'.

× Umm and I really love to shave the memory, every memory that I have encountered in my life like daily life with my friends and my family.

✓ Umm and I really love to save the memories, every memory I have made in my daily life with my friends and family.

The verb 'shave' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'save.' 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' when referring to multiple events. 'Have encountered' is awkward; use 'I have made' or simply 'I have' for experiences. 'Daily life with my friends and my family' is redundant; 'in my daily life with my friends and family' is clearer.

× To be honest, I love views in urban area.

✓ To be honest, I love views in urban areas.

'Area' should be plural 'areas' when speaking generally about urban settings. Use plural to match general preference.

× They are really modern and attract my attention to much.

✓ They are really modern and attract my attention a lot.

The phrase 'to much' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'a lot' or 'too much.' Also place adverb properly: 'attract my attention a lot' or 'attract a lot of my attention.' Suggest using 'a lot' for natural speech.

× They have tall buildings, scenic views and vibrant atmosphere.

✓ They have tall buildings, scenic views, and a vibrant atmosphere.

List elements need commas; 'vibrant atmosphere' requires the indefinite article 'a' when speaking about atmosphere in general contexts. Add Oxford comma for clarity.

× It's really good for me to hang out with my friends and take photos there.

✓ It's really nice for me to hang out with my friends and take photos there.

This sentence is mostly correct but 'good' is less natural than 'nice' in this context. Structure 'to hang out... and take photos' is correct; suggestion: use more natural adjective 'nice' or 'great.'

× I really love views in my own country Vietnam.

✓ I really love the views in my own country, Vietnam.

Add definite article 'the' before 'views' when specifying particular views. Add a comma before appositive 'Vietnam.' Preposition 'in' is fine; improve clarity with article.

× It has it is reach of beautiful beaches and mountainous areas really which is really hilarious and attractive to people in own country but also tourists, foreign tourists like I really love this artist thing.

✓ It has a wealth of beautiful beaches and mountainous areas, which are really attractive to both locals and foreign tourists; I really love this aspect.

Original contains many errors: 'It has it is reach of' is ungrammatical; correct expression is 'It has a wealth of' or 'It is rich in.' Use plural verb agreement 'which are' referring to 'beaches and mountainous areas.' 'Hilarious' is incorrect word choice; use 'beautiful' or 'appealing.' 'People in own country' should be 'locals.' 'Foreign tourists' is fine; condense 'I really love this artist thing' to 'I really love this aspect' for clarity. Suggest replacing awkward phrases and ensuring subject-verb agreement.