Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and well-structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, be slightly more concise (avoid minor redundancy) and add one brief specific example or personal detail to make it more vivid. Also use a linking word to connect the last sentence smoothly.

例: Yes, I love photographing scenic views, especially calm sunsets, rushing rivers and blue beaches. For example, last summer I took a photo of a sunset over a lake that reminded me of childhood holidays, which really made me appreciate the moment and feel nostalgic.

提案: Good direct response with a reason and an example. Improve by tightening language (avoid small grammar/word-choice errors) and using a linking word to show sequence. Also make the example more specific (mention a particular scene or time) to strengthen imagery.

例: I prefer rural views because they make me feel calm and closer to nature. For instance, when I visit my hometown in the countryside, I always photograph the misty mornings by the river so I can revisit those peaceful moments later.

提案: Your answer is clear and provides comparison and reason. To improve, avoid overextending into political/social commentary; keep it concise and balanced. Use a linking phrase to contrast and add one brief positive detail about a specific foreign scene you like.

例: I prefer views in other countries, particularly places like Switzerland and France, because their mountain scenery and well-preserved towns are very attractive. For example, I loved the clear Alpine valleys in Switzerland, which felt fresher and more tranquil compared with some polluted regions back home.

× I love taking pictures of different scenic views, especially calm sunsets, gushing rivers and blue beaches.

✓ I love taking pictures of different scenic views, especially calm sunsets, rushing rivers and blue beaches.

The original sentence uses 'gushing' to describe rivers; while 'gushing' is not strictly incorrect, 'rushing rivers' or 'flowing rivers' are more natural collocations in this context. This is a word choice/usage issue related to present participle adjectives; replace with 'rushing' for a more idiomatic and descriptive phrase.

× It is a great way to appreciate the nature around us.

✓ It is a great way to appreciate the nature around us.

No grammatical change required; sentence is correct. Included here to show no past-tense error exists.

× I also think capturing such moments makes you feel a sense of nostalgia.

✓ I also think capturing such moments makes you feel a sense of nostalgia.

Sentence is grammatically correct; 'capturing' is properly used as a gerund and no past participle is needed.

× I prefer rural views to urban ones because they give me a sense of calm and make me feel closer to nature.

✓ I prefer rural views to urban ones because they give me a sense of calm and make me feel closer to nature.

Sentence is correct; no past participle error.

× For example, whenever I visit my hometown, I take lots of photos of the scenery so that I can look back at them and they live those peaceful moments.

✓ For example, whenever I visit my hometown, I take lots of photos of the scenery so that I can look back at them and relive those peaceful moments.

The phrase 'they live those peaceful moments' is ungrammatical and likely a word choice error. The intended meaning is 'relive those peaceful moments.' Change 'they live' to 'relive' to correct the verb and clarify the subject and action.

× I prefer views in other countries, especially European ones like Switzerland, France and Germany.

✓ I prefer views in other countries, especially European ones like Switzerland, France and Germany.

Sentence is correct; no article error.

× I find their landscapes and well preserved towns very attractive and the air is much cleaner than in parts of India where pollution still remains a serious problem even in some rural areas.

✓ I find their landscapes and well-preserved towns very attractive, and the air is much cleaner than in parts of India, where pollution still remains a serious problem even in some rural areas.

Add a hyphen in 'well-preserved' because it is a compound adjective before a noun. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity: a comma before 'and' joins two independent clauses, and a comma before 'where' improves readability. These are punctuation and adjective formation issues; hyphenating 'well-preserved' makes the adjective usage correct.