Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: ปรับประโยคให้กระชับและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น โฟกัสที่ประโยคตอบหลักก่อนแล้วเสริมเหตุผลหรือรายละเอียดสั้นๆ ใช้คำและไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น ใช้ plural กับ nouns ที่เหมาะสม และจัดวางคำให้สมบูรณ์ (เช่น "show it to my" ควรระบุว่าให้ใคร) รวมทั้งหลีกเลี่ยงคำซ้ำและเสียงว่างเปล่า (uh, mm).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing beautiful landscapes and interesting scenes because it helps me preserve memories. I also like sharing the photos with my friends and family so they can see the places I have visited.

提案: ตอบให้ชัดเจนด้วยประโยคหัวข้อที่ระบุความชอบ (urban or rural) แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างเจาะจง ใช้ linking words เช่น "because" หรือ "so" เพื่อเชื่อมความคิด และหลีกเลียงคำเว้นวรรคและการพูดซ้ำ แสดงตัวอย่างหรือเหตุผลเช่นความคุ้นเคย บรรยากาศ หรือโอกาสถ่ายรูปในอนาคต

例: I prefer rural views because they feel familiar and peaceful to me. The countryside often has quiet fields and traditional houses, which are great for photography and for keeping special memories for the future.

提案: ให้ตอบชัดเจนว่าชอบแบบไหนหรือว่าทั้งสองอย่าง แล้วอธิบายเหตุผลที่แตกต่างกันในแต่ละกรณี ใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและให้รายละเอียดเฉพาะ เช่น วัฒนธรรม สถาปัตยกรรม หรือความทรงจำที่ต่างกัน ใช้ linking words (e.g., "on one hand", "on the other hand") เพื่อเปรียบเทียบสองทางเลือก

例: I like both views for different reasons. On one hand, I enjoy taking photos in my own country because the familiar landscapes remind me of home and family. On the other hand, I love photographing places abroad because the different cultures and architecture offer new and exciting subjects.

× I like to take picture when I see beautiful landscapes and stunning wheels because I want to keep memories that I see this landscape and I want to show it to my.

✓ I like taking pictures when I see beautiful landscapes and stunning views because I want to keep the memory that I saw the landscape and show it to my family.

Use of gerund: after 'like' both 'like to take' and 'like taking' are possible, but 'taking pictures' is more natural here; 'picture' needs plural 'pictures' to match general action (singular/plural issue ID 1 also relevant); 'wheels' is incorrect word choice — context suggests 'views'; tense consistency: use past participle or simple past 'saw' for a remembered event or keep present 'see' depending on meaning; add missing object 'family' after 'my'. Suggestions: use 'taking pictures', use plural 'pictures', choose correct word 'views', and include the object for 'my'.

× MMM, maybe pretty, uh, year barn area because I'm, I feel familiar with this view, but I want to keep memory.

✓ Maybe a pretty rural area because I feel familiar with that view, but I want to keep the memory.

Singular/plural and articles: 'area' needs an article 'a' when singular; 'year barn' is likely mispronounced and should be 'rural' or 'barn' area; 'memory' generally requires 'the memory' or 'a memory' depending on context. Suggestions: add 'a' before singular countable nouns, choose correct adjective 'rural', and use 'the memory' for a specific memory.

× I will be there and Oh no, I'm here because when in the future I will.

✓ I will be there, so in the future I will remember it.

Sentence is fragmented and tense mixed: 'I will be there' and 'in the future I will' is incomplete. Use a complete future clause: 'I will remember it' or 'I will be able to remember it'. Suggestions: finish the clause after 'will' and avoid repeating tense unnecessarily.

× Maybe bought because I think is has, uh, it has two way, so different, uh, in own own country, I want to take it because I want to keep memories.

✓ Maybe both, because I think it has two aspects, so it's different. In my own country, I want to take pictures because I want to keep memories.

Verb and structure errors: 'bought' is incorrect; should be 'both'. Missing subject 'it' and incorrect 'is has' — use 'it has' or 'it has two aspects'. 'Two way' should be 'two aspects' or 'two sides'. Repetition 'own own' should be 'my own'. Also 'take it' unclear; use 'take pictures'. Suggestions: use 'both', include proper subject-verb order 'it has', and correct nouns/phrases for clarity.

× But in uh, for other countries, I want to keep it because.

✓ But for other countries, I also want to keep memories because they are different and interesting.

Fragmented sentence: 'I want to keep it because.' is incomplete and unclear what 'it' refers to. Provide a clear object and reason: 'keep memories' or 'keep the photos' and give a complete reason. Suggestions: avoid sentence fragments; complete the clause with a reason.