Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g., "great great", "commemorate me witnessing", "sceneries") and finish with one specific supporting detail. Use a linking phrase if adding a reason.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines, which I later use in a photo album to remind myself of those trips.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear preference with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases like "it depends" without explaining the conditions. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "because") and give one precise example.

例: I usually prefer urban views because I enjoy the contrast of modern architecture and city lights. However, when I want peace and nature, I choose rural landscapes like quiet lakes or rolling hills.

提案: Be decisive and correct grammatical errors (e.g., "timely adhere to local culture", "Vista"). Give clear contrasting reasons and one specific example for each side. Use linking phrases like "on the other hand" correctly.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they connect me to local traditions, such as visiting ancestral mountains and historic sites. On the other hand, I enjoy overseas scenery occasionally, for example exploring coastal towns in Spain, because the architecture and food are completely different.

× The prime reason is that this is a great great way to commemorate me witnessing such kind of sceneries and.

✓ The main reason is that it is a great way to commemorate witnessing such scenery.

'Commemorate me witnessing' incorrectly uses a reflexive/oblique structure; 'commemorate' is transitive and should take a noun or gerund phrase as its object. 'Me witnessing' is awkward; use the gerund 'witnessing' or a noun phrase. Also 'great great' is redundant and 'sceneries' is uncountable or usually 'scenery'. Use 'main' instead of 'prime' for naturalness and remove the trailing conjunction 'and'. Suggestion: 'The main reason is that it is a great way to commemorate witnessing such scenery.'

× Well, it depends. It is primarily due to the reason that I can enjoy appreciating picturesque scenery wherever it is.

✓ Well, it depends. It is primarily because I can enjoy picturesque scenery wherever I am.

'Due to the reason that' is wordy and unidiomatic; replace with 'because'. 'Enjoy appreciating' is redundant—use either 'enjoy' or 'appreciate'; 'appreciating' is unnecessary with 'enjoy'. 'Wherever it is' is vague; use 'wherever I am' to refer to your location. Also 'picturesque scenery' is uncountable, so no article needed.

× And that said, I prefer urban views sometimes because it seems more developed.

✓ And that said, I sometimes prefer urban views because they seem more developed.

Subject-verb agreement: 'urban views' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should be plural ('they seem' not 'it seems'). Also move 'sometimes' to a natural position: 'I sometimes prefer'. This corrects agreement and improves word order.

× I am not entirely sure about that.

✓ I am not entirely sure about that.

This sentence is correct in present tense and matches the question context; no change needed.

× On one hand, natural landscapes in my country feel familiar and meaningful since I am timely adhere to local culture.

✓ On one hand, natural landscapes in my country feel familiar and meaningful because I adhere to the local culture.

'Since' can work but 'because' is clearer for reason. 'I am timely adhere' is ungrammatical: use the verb 'adhere' with proper subject-verb structure ('I adhere') or a progressive form if needed ('I am committed to' or 'I follow'). Also add the article 'the' before 'local culture' for specificity. Suggestion: 'because I adhere to the local culture' or 'because I follow local cultural practices.'

× On the other hand, the sceneries in other countries may seem exotic since they offer a totally different Vista.

✓ On the other hand, the scenery in other countries may seem exotic because it offers a totally different vista.

'Sceneries' is not commonly used; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. Maintain number consistency: 'scenery...offers' or use 'views...offer'. 'Vista' should be lowercase. Also 'since' can be used but 'because' is clearer. Ensure subject-verb agreement: singular 'scenery' with 'offers'.