Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid repetition. For example, say you enjoy photographing landscapes and mention a specific situation or reason.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often go on short trips with friends to photograph coastal sunsets and then we compare our shots to learn from each other.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with a specific reason and an example. Remove filler sounds like “MMM” and fix grammar (e.g., “I prefer rural areas because I prefer nature to cities”). Use a linking word to connect reason and example.

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy being surrounded by nature. For instance, hiking in the countryside lets me relax in quiet fields and photograph wildflowers away from city noise.

提案: Respond directly and clearly: state your preference, give a reason and one specific example. Correct sentences and avoid vague phrases like “I put it for a view.” Explain how views differ and use linking words (because, for example).

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For example, I love photographing coastal towns abroad since the architecture and light there feel very different from the scenes in my country.