Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), and provide one specific example with a linking phrase. Use correct verb patterns (interested in taking pictures).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because I love capturing visual details. For example, when I visit parks or gardens, I often focus on contrasts between light and shadow to create interesting shots.

提案: Make the answer more specific and add a linking phrase for clarity. Explain briefly why facilities and public transport matter with a concrete detail or short example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer better facilities and public transport, which makes exploring and meeting people much easier. For instance, I can take a short bus ride to visit a rooftop park or a nearby gallery.

提案: Correct the obvious word choice error (meals → views) and keep statements concise. Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with one specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' appropriately.

例: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes feel familiar and tied to my culture. For example, visiting the mountains and historical sites near my hometown always brings back memories and is more convenient than traveling abroad.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I'm very interested taking pictures.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I'm very interested in taking pictures.

The verb phrase 'interested' requires the preposition 'in' before a gerund. This is a preposition + -ing form construction. Add 'in' to make the expression grammatically correct: 'interested in taking pictures.' Suggestion: Use 'interested in' + verb-ing when describing things you enjoy or are curious about.

× For example, umm, whenever I go to park or garden or any different place or different views, I'm very interested, umm taking pictures.

✓ For example, umm, whenever I go to a park or a garden or any different place or view, I'm very interested in taking pictures.

Multiple issues: 'go to park' and 'go to garden' need the indefinite article 'a' (article errors, ID 22), and again 'interested' requires 'in' before a gerund (Verb + -ing form, ID 8). Also 'different views' is redundant after 'different place'; use singular 'view' or keep 'places'. Suggestion: use articles with countable singular nouns and 'interested in' + verb-ing.

× I prefer urban areas because they have more facilities and public transport so it's easier to study and meet people.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they have more facilities and public transport, so it's easier to study and meet people.

Mainly punctuation: add a comma before 'so' when linking independent clauses. Also 'they have' is correct referring to 'urban areas' (no pronoun error). However the sentence could be misread as 'it's easier to study'—this is acceptable but to be clearer: 'so it is easier to study and meet people there.' Suggestion: include a comma before coordinating conjunctions joining full clauses and optionally add 'there' for clarity.

× I prefer meals in my own country because the landscapes feel familiar and connected to my culture and memories.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes feel familiar and connected to my culture and memories.

The student likely meant 'views' not 'meals'; using the wrong noun is a word choice error related to pronouns/nouns. Replace 'meals' with 'views' to match the question and the rest of the response. Suggestion: ensure your subject matches the topic of the question.

× For example, I enjoy visiting nearby mountains and historical sites where I grew up, which makes the experience more meaningful and easier to access than traveling abroad.

✓ For example, I enjoy visiting nearby mountains and historical sites where I grew up, which makes the experience more meaningful and easier to access than traveling abroad.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable. If any small change, for clarity use 'than when traveling abroad' but not necessary. No correction required based on the provided grammar problem list.