Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容清晰，观点明确，有具体细节（绿色植物、河流、山景）并表达了感受。但存在时态和一致性的小问题（如“made me feel”应为“make me feel”），句子可以更紧凑并使用连接词以提高流畅度。此外可加入一两个具体例子或拍摄场景来丰富内容但仍保持在5句以内。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures when I go hiking, especially of lush greenery, rivers, and mountain views. The fresh air and vibrant colors make me feel relaxed, so I prefer photographing natural scenery. For example, last summer I captured a misty valley at sunrise, which highlighted the layers of hills and soft light.

提案: 回答表达了明确偏好并给出原因，但有语法和表达上的不自然（如“I was growing up from the countryside”应为“I grew up in the countryside”或“I was brought up in the countryside”）。第二句可合并并用连接词使表达更流畅，同时加入一具体对比（例如城市的喧闹）会更有说服力。保持句数不超过5句。

例: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside and feel more at home there. I love the rivers, mountains, trees and the flowers around my house, which feel peaceful and natural. In contrast, urban areas often feel crowded and noisy, so I usually choose the countryside when I want to relax.

提案: 回答结构良好，先给出明确偏好并解释原因，再指出开放的态度。可以通过加入具体回忆或对比细节来增强说服力（例如记忆中的某个地方或独特的景色），并使用连接词使句子更连贯。注意保持时态一致性。

例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and always remind me of fond childhood memories, like swimming in a clear village river near my home. That said, I would also love to explore scenery in other countries someday to see different landscapes and cultures.

× The fresh air and vibrant colors made me feel relaxed, so I prefer photographing natural scenery.

✓ The fresh air and vibrant colors make me feel relaxed, so I prefer photographing natural scenery.

原句中用 made（过去式）与句子其它部分的时态和语境不一致。学生在谈论一般的喜好和习惯（现在时），因此应使用一般现在时 make。建议将动词改为一般现在时以表示经常性或普遍事实："make"。

× I prefer views in rural areas because I was growing up from the countryside.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I grew up in the countryside.

“was growing up”为过去进行时，通常用于在过去某一时间段正在发生的动作，但这里想表达的是在过去成长的事实，应使用一般过去时 "grew up"。此外短语应为 "grow up in" 而不是 "from"。建议使用 "grew up in the countryside"。

× I love the rivers, mountains and trees, flowers surrounding my house.

✓ I love the rivers, mountains, trees and flowers surrounding my house.

原句中列举名词时缺少合适的逗号分隔并且词序略显混乱。需要用逗号清晰分隔各项并保持并列结构："rivers, mountains, trees and flowers"。另可根据语境决定是否在前面加定冠词，但并不必要。建议调整为并列列举并加上逗号以提高可读性。

× I enjoy living in this kind of environment.

✓ I enjoy living in this kind of environment.

该句语法正确，使用一般现在时表示喜好，与语境一致，无需修改。