Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản (ví dụ: 'I'm really like' → 'I really like', 'take picture' → 'taking pictures'), sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể với liên từ để câu mạch lạc. Hãy giữ độ dài câu không quá dài (tối đa 5 câu). Ví dụ, bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó mở rộng bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về nơi chụp và cảm nhận cá nhân.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often go to the beach to photograph sunsets because the colours are stunning and change quickly. I also like hiking in the mountains to capture wide panoramas, which makes me feel peaceful.

提案: Bạn cần sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng cho phù hợp ('in because now I'm live' → 'because I live', 'hostile and coastal' không phù hợp). Nên nêu lý do rõ ràng và mô tả cụ thể (ví dụ: yên tĩnh, thiên nhiên, không khí trong lành). Dùng liên từ như 'because' hoặc 'so' một cách chính xác để kết nối ý. Tránh lặp từ và đảm bảo câu hoàn chỉnh.

例: I prefer rural views because I live in a busy city and I miss quiet, natural landscapes. For instance, I enjoy photographing farms and open fields where the light and colours feel more peaceful and less crowded.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và sửa cấu trúc (ví dụ: 'both of views' → 'both the views' hoặc 'both views', 'in other country' → 'in other countries'). Nên nêu lý do cụ thể cho mỗi lựa chọn và đưa ví dụ khác biệt giữa cảnh trong nước và nước ngoài. Dùng liên từ như 'because' và 'for example' để giải thích hợp lý.

例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad. In my country we have beautiful landscapes like mountains and rice terraces, but when I travel overseas I can see different architectures and cultural scenes, which inspire me in new ways.

× Yes, I'm really like take picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views.

This sentence uses the incorrect verb form and word forms: 'I'm really like' is wrong because 'like' is a stative verb and should not follow 'am' in that way (Grammar Problem Type 2/6/8). Use 'I really like' (simple present) and the gerund 'taking' after 'like'. Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general preference (singular/plural issue). Suggestion: use 'I really like taking pictures of different views.'

× Uh, I like go to the beach, umm, go to the mountain to take new photo.

✓ I like going to the beach and to the mountains to take new photos.

After 'like', use the gerund form 'going' rather than the base verb 'go' (Grammar Problem Type 8). Use plural 'mountains' and 'photos' for natural general statements (Grammar Problem Type 1). Combine coordinated actions using 'and' for better sentence structure (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: 'I like going to the beach and to the mountains to take new photos.'

× Beautiful photo.

✓ They are beautiful photos.

This is a fragment lacking a subject and verb (Grammar Problem Type 23/26). To make a full sentence, add a subject and verb: 'They are beautiful photos.' Use plural 'photos' to match general statement (Grammar Problem Type 1). Suggestion: expand fragments into complete sentences.

× I prefer views in rural areas because in because now I'm live in urban areas so it's very hostile and coastal.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I now live in an urban area, which is very busy and crowded.

Errors: repeated 'because in because' and incorrect present tense 'I'm live' should be 'I live' or 'I'm living' (Grammar Problem Type 6). Use 'in urban areas' vs 'an urban area' for consistency; choose one. 'Hostile and coastal' is incorrect word choice for describing a city — likely meant 'busy and crowded' (Grammar Problem Type 13). Also 'which' helps connect clauses (Grammar Problem Type 16). Suggestion: 'I prefer views in rural areas because I now live in an urban area, which is very busy and crowded.'

× So I like go to the rural area to take photo Farmer farm.

✓ So I like going to the countryside to take photos of farms.

Use the gerund 'going' after 'like' (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'Rural area' can be more naturally 'the countryside' and 'take photo Farmer farm' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'take photos of farms' (Grammar Problem Type 26/17). Use plural 'photos' and plural 'farms' for general statements (Grammar Problem Type 1). Suggestion: 'So I like going to the countryside to take photos of farms.'

× I prefer both of views in my country and in other country, because in my country have really nice landscape maybe and in all the country I can see another I.

✓ I prefer views both in my country and in other countries, because my country has really nice landscapes, and in other countries I can see different scenery.

Multiple errors: 'both of views' should be 'views both' or 'both views' (Grammar Problem Type 14/26). Use plural 'other countries' and 'landscapes' for general meaning (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'In my country have' lacks subject-verb agreement; it should be 'my country has' (Grammar Problem Type 27/5). The final clause 'I can see another I' is unclear; likely intended 'I can see different scenery' or 'I can see other kinds of views' (Grammar Problem Type 26/13). Suggestion: 'I prefer views both in my country and in other countries, because my country has really nice landscapes, and in other countries I can see different scenery.'