Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Avoid repetition and make your main point clear in one sentence, then add one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitation and unnecessary fillers.

例: I prefer handwriting because it lets me work at my own pace. For example, when I write by hand I can choose a comfortable pen and I don’t have to look for keys, which helps me concentrate better.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and finish your thought. Use linking words to contrast locations and give a concise reason for your preference.

例: I use both desktop and laptop keyboards. At work I usually type on a desktop, whereas at home I use my laptop keyboard because it is more portable and comfortable to use.

提案: Start with a clear time reference, avoid long hesitations and add one specific detail about the experience. Use a linking word to add the memory or feeling.

例: I learned to type in elementary school when we got our first family computer. I can’t remember the exact age, but I clearly remember being excited because typing classes felt like a fun new skill to master.

提案: Give a concise main sentence, then describe one or two specific methods and their benefits. Remove filler phrases and repeat words.

例: I improve my typing by practicing on online typing websites because they provide timed exercises and accuracy feedback. For instance, I use a typing tutor that tracks my speed and highlights keys I frequently mistype, so I can focus on them.

× I actually feel I actually prefer handwriting because I can keep my own pace unlike the typing.

✓ I actually prefer handwriting because I can keep my own pace, unlike typing.

The sentence contains a repeated phrase 'I actually' which is unnecessary and makes the sentence wordy (Sentence structure error). Also 'the typing' uses an unnecessary definite article when speaking generally about the activity of typing. Remove the duplicate 'I actually' and the article 'the' before 'typing' to make the sentence concise and natural. Suggestion: Say 'I prefer handwriting because I can keep my own pace, unlike typing.'.

× I need to find where the keys are so in handwriting I can pick which pens that I want to use.

✓ I need to find the keys when typing, so with handwriting I can pick the pens I want to use.

The original mixes ideas and misuses 'which ... that' relative clause structure. 'Which pens that I want' is incorrect; use either 'which I want' or 'that I want'. Also the sentence sequence is confusing about finding keys vs choosing pens. Reordering clarifies meaning and corrects pronoun/relative clause use. Suggestion: Separate the two contrasted ideas: 'I need to find the keys when typing, so with handwriting I can pick the pens I want to use.'.

× Yes, I use. I type on desktop if I'm if I'm at work and I type on my laptop keyboard when I'm at when I'm at home.

✓ Yes, I do. I type on a desktop when I'm at work and on my laptop when I'm at home.

The original has fragments ('Yes, I use.') and repeated phrases ('if I'm if I'm', 'when I'm at when I'm at') causing sentence structure errors. Replace the fragment with 'Yes, I do.' and remove repetitions. Use parallel structure 'on a desktop ... and on my laptop ...' for clarity. Suggestion: 'Yes, I do. I type on a desktop when I'm at work and on my laptop when I'm at home.'.

× So basically I used both, but I actually prefer my laptop keyboard because it's it's mostly.

✓ Basically I use both, but I prefer my laptop keyboard because it is more comfortable.

'I used both' is incorrect tense/context; present habit requires 'I use both'. The phrase 'it's it's mostly' is an incomplete sentence with repetition. Replace with a complete reason matching present preference, e.g., 'it is more comfortable.' Suggestion: 'Basically I use both, but I prefer my laptop keyboard because it is more comfortable.'.

× Since when I was in elementary school, I can't remember the exact age that I was, but it I remember that the time it happened was when we got our first computer back in my elementary days and it was quite thrilling.

✓ Back when I was in elementary school, I can't remember the exact age, but I remember that it happened when we got our first computer; it was quite thrilling.

Mixed tenses and redundant phrases cause confusion. 'Since when I was' is incorrect — use 'Back when I was'. Keep present ability to not remember ('I can't remember') but place the event in the past with 'it happened' and 'we got'. Remove duplicate words ('it I remember that the time it happened'). Suggestion: 'Back when I was in elementary school, I can't remember the exact age, but I remember that it happened when we got our first computer; it was quite thrilling.'.

× So what I do to improve my typing is I usually use my laptop keyboard 'cause I'm more comfortable using it.

✓ To improve my typing, I usually use my laptop keyboard because I'm more comfortable using it.

The original ordering is conversational but slightly awkward. Beginning with 'To improve my typing' is clearer. Also replace colloquial ''cause' with 'because'. This addresses preposition/phrase placement and formality. Suggestion: 'To improve my typing, I usually use my laptop keyboard because I'm more comfortable using it.'.

× So what I do is like I open up a website that I can type like a type type and exercise on how to improve my typing.

✓ I open a website where I can practice typing exercises to improve my typing.

The original uses awkward filler phrases ('is like', 'type like a type type') and incorrect verb forms. Use 'practice' + noun 'typing exercises' or 'practice typing' (verb + -ing) for natural expression. Also remove filler 'like' and clarify purpose with 'to improve my typing.' Suggestion: 'I open a website where I can practice typing exercises to improve my typing.'.