Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct tense; remove hesitations and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use one linking phrase for reason, and give a brief specific example. Fix grammar (prefer → preferred or I prefer).

例: I prefer handwriting to typing because writing things down helps me remember them more effectively. For example, when I studied for exams I wrote notes by hand and remembered key facts more easily than when I typed them.

提案: Remove filler words and repetitions; use correct verb tenses and a clearer structure: topic sentence + brief supporting detail + contrast. Be specific about frequency and the kind of work.

例: I type on a desktop every day because my job requires entering patients' medical histories into the system. Although this has helped me become faster, I still prefer writing notes by hand for studying.

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct answer and add one specific detail using a linking word. Remove hesitations and duplicate words.

例: I learned to type in high school because we had a compulsory computer class. As a result, I practiced regularly and improved my speed during that year.

提案: Be concise and correct small errors; use a linking word to connect two methods and give a short example or result. Avoid fillers and correct phrasing (e.g., 'it's faster when my eyes are on the monitor').

例: I improve my typing by memorizing the keyboard and practicing touch-typing, so I don't look at the keys. For instance, I timed myself weekly and reduced my errors and increased my speed.

× Even when I was a student, I always prefer writing because when I write the words it it directly, umm, paced into my mind and that's easy for me to remember.

✓ Even when I was a student, I always preferred writing because when I wrote the words they went directly into my mind, and it was easy for me to remember.

The speaker mixes present tense with past context. 'When I was a student' requires past tense: 'always preferred' and 'wrote'. 'It it' is a repetition and should be removed. 'Paced into my mind' is incorrect verb choice and form; use 'went into my mind'. Use 'they' to refer to 'the words' (plural) for correct pronoun agreement.

× Yeah, I'm able, yeah, I'm able to type on a desktop every day due to my work, umm, typing information of patients, their histories.

✓ Yes, I am able to type on a desktop every day because of my work, entering patients' information and their histories.

The filler 'yeah' is informal but not a grammar error; focus on grammatical fixes. Use 'am' instead of contraction repetition and 'because of' rather than 'due to' in this clause. 'Typing information of patients' is awkward; use 'entering patients' information'. Use possessive form 'patients'' for plural possessive.

× And by with that, umm, I will I I was able to practice typing, but then I still prefer writing.

✓ And because of that, I was able to practice typing, but I still preferred writing.

The sentence mixes future/modal 'will' and past 'was' and repeats words. Since speaking about past ability, use past simple 'was able' and maintain past preference 'preferred'. 'By with that' is incorrect phrase; use 'because of that'.

× Ever since high school, uh, there is this subject in in our school that requires us to learn to type on a computer.

✓ Ever since high school, there has been a subject at our school that required us to learn to type on a computer.

The time expression 'ever since high school' indicates a period starting in the past; use present perfect 'has been' or past reference with 'required'. Here consistency: 'there has been' fits continuous existence; alternatively past 'was a subject'. Use 'at our school' rather than 'in our school'. Avoid repeating 'in'.

× I improve my typing by memorizing the keyboard and I also type without looking at the keyboard because for me it's faster what when my eyes are focused on the monitor.

✓ I improve my typing by memorizing the keyboard, and I also type without looking at it because it is faster when my eyes are focused on the monitor.

The clause 'what when' is ungrammatical and should be removed. Use 'it' to avoid repeating 'the keyboard'. Use simple present 'improve' is acceptable for habitual action. Clarify 'it is faster when my eyes are focused on the monitor' for clear comparison.