Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix subject-verb agreement and avoid fragments. For example, say you prefer handwriting, explain why with a concrete example (journal, meetings), and conclude briefly.

例: I prefer handwriting. For example, I keep a personal journal and take handwritten notes during meetings because writing helps me organize my ideas more clearly. Therefore, I often choose a notebook over a laptop for studying and planning.

提案: Answer directly and streamline filler words. Use linking words to contrast preference and reality. Mention specifics (laptop, weekdays, customer enquiries) in one or two sentences without hesitations.

例: Yes, I type on my work laptop every weekday. Although I prefer handwriting, my job requires me to respond to many customer enquiries through chat, so I spend several hours typing each day.

提案: Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (tense and plurality). Give a clear timeline and a concise description of the learning context with one supporting detail. Avoid unclear words like "commuter machine"—use "computer" or "typing tutor".

例: I learned to type when I was about ten at primary school. We used an old computer typing program, and our teacher gave us regular practice sessions, which my friends and I enjoyed because it felt like a game.

提案: Be more specific about the methods and use correct verb forms. Mention frequency, technique names (touch-typing), and measurable improvement. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I practice touch-typing without looking at the keyboard for at least 15 minutes each day, and I also use online typing exercises to increase my speed. Because I type a lot at work, this regular practice has noticeably improved my accuracy and speed.

× I personally prefer handwriting I love writing my own journal and record my meeting or even study with handwriting.

✓ I personally prefer handwriting. I love writing my own journal, recording my meetings, or even studying with handwriting.

Missing punctuation and incorrect articles/verb forms. Add a period to separate sentences, use gerunds (recording, studying) after 'love', and pluralize 'meeting' to 'meetings' for general activities. Also add a comma to separate items in a list.

× I think it make me. Get her my idea better. Which will be better?

✓ I think it makes my ideas clearer. Which is better?

Subject-verb agreement: 'it' requires 'makes' (third person singular). The original fragmentation and word order caused unclear meaning; 'get her my idea better' is incorrect. Use 'makes my ideas clearer' for clarity. 'Which will be better?' is not appropriate here; use 'Which is better?' to ask for preference.

× Yes, at the moment I do have to type on my work laptop every day, well actually just on weekdays.

✓ Yes, at the moment I have to type on my work laptop every day, well actually just on weekdays.

Redundant use of 'do' with 'have to' is unnecessary in affirmative statements. Use 'have to' without 'do'. The tense and meaning remain present obligation.

× Umm yeah, even though I don't prefer typing, but because of work I do have to type and reply a lot of customer enquiry chat.

✓ Umm yeah, even though I don't prefer typing, because of work I have to type and reply to a lot of customer enquiry chats.

Do not use 'even though' and 'but' together; choose one. Use 'have to' without 'do' in affirmative obligation. Add 'to' after 'reply' and pluralize 'chats' and use 'customer enquiry' as 'customer enquiry chats' or better 'customer enquiries' depending on variety. Also correct word order for clarity.

× Umm, back when I was around 10 years old at my primary school there was a big uh, commuter machine, the old version 1.

✓ Umm, back when I was around 10 years old at my primary school, there was a big computer machine, the old version 1.

Likely typo 'commuter' should be 'computer'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause. 'Computer machine' is redundant; 'computer' is sufficient, but kept 'computer machine' to preserve speaker meaning.

× And our teacher will let us practice typing with that machine and my me and my friend has so much fun back.

✓ And our teacher let us practice typing with that machine, and my friend and I had so much fun back then.

Use past tense 'let' and 'had' because describing past events. Correct subject pronoun order 'my friend and I' and agreement 'had' for plural subject. Remove extraneous 'my' before 'me'. Add 'then' for clarity.

× I try to type file without looking at the keyboard and after a while my typing get better.

✓ I try to type without looking at the keyboard, and after a while my typing gets better.

Remove unnecessary noun 'file'. 'Typing' as subject requires third person singular verb 'gets'. Add a comma to join clauses.

× Umm because I have to type for work most of the time it does help.

✓ Umm, because I have to type for work most of the time, it does help.

Missing commas around the dependent clause improve clarity. The sentence is grammatically acceptable otherwise; commas clarify structure. Alternatively, use 'this helps' for smoother phrasing.