Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid fillers like “umm” and unnecessary words (e.g., “April”).

例: I prefer handwriting to typing. Firstly, I write more naturally and can express my feelings better on paper. Secondly, I’m not a fast typist, so handwriting is usually quicker and more comfortable for me.

提案: Give a direct, coherent response with one clear reason and use linking words to connect ideas. Remove repetition and awkward pauses.

例: No, I don't type on a desktop every day because I’m on summer vacation and I don’t have classes for about two months. As a result, I rarely use a desktop during this period.

提案: Answer directly with a clear time reference, then add a specific supporting detail. Correct small grammar points (e.g., “an elementary school,” “in fifth or sixth grade,” tense consistency).

例: I learned to type when I was in elementary school, probably in fifth or sixth grade. At first I didn’t enjoy it, but I gradually improved through practice.

提案: Describe the method clearly and add specific details about the game and practice routine. Use linking words to make it coherent and avoid hesitation sounds.

例: I improved my typing by using online typing games that focus on speed and accuracy. For example, I practiced 20 minutes a day on a touch-typing game which gradually increased in difficulty, helping me type faster and make fewer mistakes.

× April Handwriting because umm, I'm not good at typing fast and I think I can write my feeling with handwriting.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I'm not good at typing quickly and I think I can express my feelings better in handwriting.

Original uses a proper name 'April' likely intended as 'I prefer'; pronoun/word choice error. 'typing fast' -> adverb 'quickly'. 'write my feeling' -> 'express my feelings' and use plural. Suggestion: use 'I prefer' for preference, use adverbs for verbs, and 'express my feelings' for natural phrasing.

× No, I don't because now I'm in. Now I'm in a summer vacation so the so I have no class for about two months, so I don't type on a desktop.

✓ No, I don't. I'm on summer vacation now, so I have no classes for about two months and I don't type on a desktop.

Problems include awkward phrasing 'I'm in. Now I'm in a summer vacation' and singular 'class' should be plural 'classes'. Use 'on summer vacation' and combine clauses with 'so'. Suggestion: remove fragments, use correct preposition 'on', pluralize countable nouns, and join ideas into clear sentences.

× I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was in a elementary school.

✓ I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was in elementary school.

Article error: 'a elementary school' is incorrect because 'elementary' begins with a vowel sound and the phrase 'in elementary school' typically does not need an article. Use past tense 'learned' is correct. Suggestion: omit 'a' before 'elementary school' or say 'an elementary school' if referring to a specific school.

× I think it's probably six or five grades, and at first I don't like typing.

✓ I think it was probably fifth or sixth grade, and at first I didn't like typing.

Tense inconsistency: referring to past event, so use past tense 'was' and 'didn't'. Also number order and phrasing changed to 'fifth or sixth grade' for natural English. Suggestion: match tense to time context and use standard grade phrasing.

× Umm, I used a game that. Trying that is like trying to type on a desktop as fast as I can.

✓ I used a game that involved practicing typing; it was like trying to type on a desktop as fast as I could.

Fragment and incorrect verb forms: 'used a game that. Trying that' is a fragment. 'Trying that is like trying to type' is repetitive; use past tense 'involved practicing' and 'could' to match past context. Suggestion: combine sentences to avoid fragments and use correct verb forms for past activities.