Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fix repetitions/grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repeating words and correct common errors (e.g., “more better” → “better”, “correct our mistake” → “correct mistakes”).

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because I use computers a lot as an IT student. For example, typing lets me edit and correct mistakes quickly, and it’s faster for long assignments, so it suits my study routine.

提案: Clarify meaning and remove hesitations. Use one clear reason first (portability), then add a supporting detail. Avoid incorrect words (e.g., “edible” is wrong) and reduce filler words like “uh.”

例: I usually type on a laptop because it’s portable and I can work wherever I go. For instance, I can take it to classes or cafés, which makes my study and coding schedule more flexible and efficient.

提案: Give a clear time reference and one or two specific details about learning. Correct grammar (e.g., “how can I use” → “how to use”) and avoid repeating similar adjectives (effective, efficient, accurate).

例: I learned to type when I was about in grade three or four at school. My computer teacher taught us basic keyboard skills and shortcuts, which helped me type faster and with fewer mistakes.

提案: Be specific about the resources and use clearer structure: topic sentence + supporting detail. Remove fillers and correct phrases (e.g., “various resources on the Internet”, “on a daily basis”, “improve accuracy and speed”).

例: I improve my typing using online typing lessons and practice tests, such as typing websites and apps. I practice for 20–30 minutes daily, focusing on accuracy first and then gradually increasing my speed.

× As I am an IT student where I have to work through my computer computer an hour and hour.

✓ As an IT student, I have to work on my computer for hours.

The original sentence has redundant words ('computer' repeated), incorrect use of 'where', and awkward time expression 'an hour and hour'. Use 'As an IT student' as the introductory phrase, 'work on my computer' for activity, and 'for hours' to express long or repeated periods. Remove redundancy and incorrect relative clause.

× So I guess I prefer typing over handwriting because typing seems more effective and we can correct our mistake without cutting any things or any sentences.

✓ So I prefer typing to handwriting because typing seems more effective, and we can correct our mistakes without cutting anything or deleting sentences.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A over B' (both are possible but 'to' is more natural here); 'more effective' is fine but 'more better' later is wrong. 'Mistake' should be plural 'mistakes' to match general sense. 'Cutting any things' is unidiomatic; use 'cutting anything' or 'deleting sentences'. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction.

× So typing seems to be more better.

✓ So typing seems to be better.

'More better' is incorrect because 'better' is already the comparative form of 'good'; do not add 'more' before a comparative adjective. Use 'better' alone.

× I always type on a laptop keyboard because it is so much, uh, edible and where it can be work whenever and wherever I could take and then I can take.

✓ I always type on a laptop keyboard because it is very portable and I can use it whenever and wherever I need to.

'Edible' is the wrong word; intended 'portable'. 'Where it can be work' is ungrammatical: use active 'I can use it'. 'Whenever and wherever I could take and then I can take' is confused; use 'whenever and wherever I need to' to show ability. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'I always type' is correct; no third-person singular error here but sentence structure and word choice were wrong.

× So it's more efficient and it effective way for people who work on a daily basis in a counter elective basis.

✓ So it's a more efficient and effective way for people who work on a daily basis.

Original has redundant and incorrect phrases ('it effective way', 'counter elective basis'). Use the article 'a' before the noun phrase and place adjectives in correct order: 'more efficient and effective'. Remove nonsensical 'counter elective basis' and keep 'on a daily basis'.

× I learned this method when I was very small.

✓ I learned this method when I was very young.

'Very small' is normally used for objects or children in physical size; for age, 'very young' is idiomatic. Past tense 'learned' fits the question about when.

× I guess when I was at grade 3 or 4, my computer teacher used to teach me how to how can I use my laptop, how to use Microsoft or any kind of keyboard, how to write in a fast way and more effective and efficient and accurate way.

✓ I think when I was in grade 3 or 4, my computer teacher taught me how to use a laptop and Microsoft programs, how to use the keyboard, and how to type faster, more efficiently, and more accurately.

Use 'in grade 3 or 4' rather than 'at grade'. Remove 'used to' when describing a single past action and avoid the incorrect 'how can I use' word order. 'Microsoft' should be 'Microsoft programs' or 'Microsoft Word'. Combine parallel items with consistent forms: 'how to use', 'how to type faster', and use adverbial comparatives 'more efficiently' and 'more accurately'.

× I improve my typing through various kind of resources, uh, providing in the, uh, Internet, which is available at the Internet.

✓ I improve my typing through various kinds of resources available on the Internet.

Use plural 'kinds' to match 'various', and the preposition 'on the Internet' is correct rather than 'in the Internet' or 'at the Internet'. Also remove unnecessary filler words and redundancy ('providing', 'which is available').

× So I basically practice in the daily basis to in order to, uh, uh, make my accuracy more good and in order to increase my speed level.

✓ So I basically practice on a daily basis to improve my accuracy and increase my speed.

Use the phrase 'on a daily basis' (preposition 'on'), not 'in the daily basis'. 'Make my accuracy more good' is ungrammatical; use 'improve my accuracy'. 'Increase my speed level' is wordy; 'increase my speed' is natural. Remove filler words and redundant 'in order to'.