Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答有清晰观点和部分细节，但语法和表达重复较多，衔接词不足。建议：1) 开头直接表明立场（topic sentence）。2) 用一到两个支持句说明原因，避免重复；使用连接词如 “because”, “so”, “also”。3) 注意时态和冠词，简化表达使句子更自然。举例练习：将“practice calligraphy since I was really young”改为“I have practised calligraphy since childhood.”

例: I prefer handwriting because I find it more enjoyable and relaxing. I have practised calligraphy since childhood, so writing by hand helps me calm down and focus. Typing, on the other hand, feels quite mechanical and less satisfying for me.

提案: 回答意思能被理解，但句子混乱、重复且缺少清晰结构。建议：1) 直接给出答案（desktop或laptop）。2) 用一两句解释使用场景并用连接词（e.g., “because”, “only”）。3) 避免口头语如“MMM”“literally”，注意词序和单复数。

例: I use a desktop most days because I study and game on it at home. I only use my laptop occasionally, mainly for travelling or when I need to work outside.

提案: 回答包含关键信息但表达不准确且冗长。建议：1) 明确时间点（e.g., at school, when I was X years old）。2) 用一两个简洁句子说明学习方式（classes, apps）并用连接词。3) 注意语法（时态和句子结构）。

例: I learned to type at school when I was about ten years old. We had lessons that taught touch-typing, and later I downloaded apps to practise, which made typing more interesting than I expected.

提案: 回答说明用Apps练习，但表达不清楚且有语法和词汇错误。建议：1) 直接用一句话说明方法（using apps, regular practice）。2) 提供具体细节（name of app, frequency, types of exercises）并使用连接词使逻辑顺畅。3) 避免含糊或矛盾表述（如说应用既好又无聊）。

例: I improve my typing by practising regularly with typing apps. For example, I use an app called Jingshan Typing every day for about 20 minutes; it has fun game-like exercises that help me build speed and accuracy.

× I practice calligraphy since I was really young, so I think it's really good habit because it can help me calm down.

✓ I have practiced calligraphy since I was really young, so I think it's a really good habit because it can help me calm me down.

句子涉及从过去持续到现在的动作，应使用现在完成时“have practiced”而不是一般现在时“practice”。此外，名词短语“good habit”前需要不定冠词“a”，并且短语“help me calm down”中缺少宾语“me”。建议：使用现在完成时表示从过去延续到现在的情况；在可数名词前加冠词；保证动词搭配的宾语完整。

× And typing. I think it's maybe, maybe a boring, yeah, a boring way.

✓ As for typing, I think it may be a boring way.

原句中“maybe, maybe a boring”重复啰嗦，形容词“boring”用在名词“way”前需用冠词“a”，且语序应为“may be a boring way”或“may be boring”。建议：避免重复词，使用正确的助动词+形容词结构并加冠词修饰可数名词。

× MMM the desktop literally because and the situation I use the laptop is only the way is only to play the games and games fish with the desktop is the best.

✓ I use the desktop mainly, and I only use the laptop to play games. Gaming on the desktop is the best.

原句代词和结构混乱，缺少主语与正确的副词（mainly、only）。“play the games”中“the”不必要，改为“play games”。建议：用明确主语和副词表示频率或目的，去掉多余定冠词，分成几句以提高可理解性。

× MMM, when I had a class and themes to help you learn to type and I download some apps to help me type and I think type is not can be is not as boring as I imagine.

✓ When I had a class, there were themes to help you learn to type, and I downloaded some apps to help me type. I think typing is not as boring as I imagined.

该处需要区分时态：描述过去发生的动作应使用过去时“downloaded”；最后一句表达对过去或想象的比较应使用过去式“imagined”。另外，“typing”作为动名词应作主语使用；“not as...as”结构需要完整比较对象。建议：过去发生的动作用过去时，注意动名词用法和比较结构。

× By practicing on some apps for typing because uh, like the Jingshan typing passed away is a good apps and it's used some games or other way to make the process notes. That's boring.

✓ By practicing on some typing apps, like the Jingshan typing app, which is a good app. It uses some games and other methods to make the process less boring.

需使用动名词短语“practicing on typing apps”。“apps”单复数不一致且“passed away”用错（“passed away”表示去世，应删除）。“make the process notes”不通，应为“make the process less boring”或“make the process more engaging”。建议：使用正确的动名词搭配，注意单复数一致，避免错误短语，表达“使不那么无聊”用“less boring”。