Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and repetitive phrases. Also clarify ambiguous phrases like “remember the emotion” by explaining what you mean (e.g., remember content or feelings).

例: I prefer handwriting because writing by hand helps me remember information better and express my feelings more naturally. However, typing is useful when I need to write quickly or share notes online. For example, I handwrite study notes to remember key points, but I type emails because it is faster.

提案: Give a direct, fluent response with one clear reason and one brief supporting detail. Remove repetitions and hesitations. Use a linking word (because/so) to connect reason and example. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I use a laptop keyboard every day because it is more convenient and portable. For instance, I can work in different rooms or take my laptop to the library, so I rarely need a desktop.

提案: Answer with a clear past-time phrase and a concise description of how you learned. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (teach→taught). Use one specific example (a class activity) to support your answer.

例: I learned to type when I was in primary school. My teacher taught us basic keyboard skills during computer lessons, and we practiced by playing simple typing games in class.

提案: Provide a structured answer: start with the main method you use to improve typing, then give a specific example and a result. Avoid one-word answers and filleners. Mention frequency or a tool if possible to add specificity.

例: I improve my typing mainly by chatting and practicing regularly online. For example, during high school I used QQ every day to message friends, which helped increase my typing speed and accuracy over time.

× I prefer handwriting, but I think both of them are useful because if you want to, uh, if you want to get something quickly, then the typing may be the best way. And if you, uh, if I, uh, if you want to remember the emotion.

✓ I prefer handwriting, but I think both are useful. If you want to get something quickly, typing may be the best way. If you want to remember the emotion, handwriting can help.

The student alternates between 'them' and 'both' and mixes 'I' and 'you', causing pronoun inconsistency and unclear reference. Use 'both' without 'of them' for conciseness and keep the subject consistent (you) when giving general statements. Also split run-on sentence into clearer sentences. Suggested improvement: choose a consistent subject and use concise pronouns, and break long sentences into shorter ones.

× I type on I type on the keyboard, laptop keyboard every day, because the laptop is more is more convenient and for me I only have the laptop keyboard, so I don't have the other choice. I think this is the most important for me.

✓ I type on the laptop keyboard every day because the laptop is more convenient, and I only have a laptop keyboard, so I don't have another choice. I think this is the most important thing for me.

Errors: repeated phrase 'I type on', missing article before 'laptop keyboard' and awkward 'the other choice'. Use 'the laptop keyboard' or 'a laptop keyboard' consistently; 'another choice' is the correct phrase; add 'thing' to complete the idea. Suggested improvement: remove repetitions, use correct articles ('the' or 'a') and common collocations ('another choice', 'most important thing').

× I learned how to use the keyboard when I was in primary school. That time my teacher teach the teacher teach us how to use the laptop and how reaction with the computer game, with the game or with the computer and show me.

✓ I learned how to use the keyboard when I was in primary school. At that time my teacher taught us how to use the laptop and how to interact with computer games, and showed me.

Errors: 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' to match past narration (past participle/verb form). 'That time' should be 'At that time'. 'How reaction with the computer game' is ungrammatical; use 'how to interact with computer games'. 'Show me' should be 'showed me' to match past tense. Suggested improvement: use past tense verbs consistently when describing past events and use correct verb phrase 'interact with'.

× Chat more. Uh, I learned it when I, uh, when I was in primary school, but uh, the most improvement happened in my, uh, happened the time during my, uh, high school because, uh, in that time we both used QQ to chat with each other after.

✓ I chatted more. I learned it in primary school, but most of my improvement happened during high school because we used QQ to chat with each other a lot then.

'Chat more' is a fragment and unclear; 'I chatted more' fits the past context. The sentence repeats and misorders phrases ('happened in my, happened the time during my high school'); simplify to 'happened during high school'. 'In that time' should be 'then' or 'at that time'. 'After' is unnecessary. Suggested improvement: avoid fragments, remove filler words, and use clear time expressions like 'during high school' or 'then'.