Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm) and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Also correct unclear phrasing (e.g., “my writing marks” and “really very readable” are confusing).

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because my handwriting is often messy and hard to read. For example, classmates sometimes ask me to rewrite notes because they can’t understand my letters, so typing is more convenient and efficient for clear communication.

提案: Organize the response: give a direct answer then explain with clear, specific details. Remove hesitations and repetitive phrases. Use linking words (for example, also, because) to connect ideas and correct verbs (use ‘type’ not ‘tap’).

例: I type on both, but mainly on my laptop every day because I send messages and work on assignments there. I also use a desktop about five days a week to take lecture notes during class, so both devices are important to me.

提案: Provide a clear time reference and concise supporting detail. Avoid repeating the same idea and correct tense/use of words (use ‘learned at age six’ and ‘could use it’). Use one linking phrase to explain context.

例: I learned to type when I was six years old because my parents bought our first family computer then. From that age I spent a lot of time using it, so I practiced typing while learning basic programs and games.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific method with a linking word. Remove fillers and use correct grammar (e.g., ‘I usually take notes’). You can add one detail about frequency or an example of a typing practice method to sound proactive.

例: I don’t practice formally, but I improve my typing casually by taking notes on my desktop during classes. For example, typing for two hours a day while summarizing lectures has improved my speed and accuracy over time.

× I definitely prefer typing uh, because first of all, I'm not really good at handwriting my words, umm, and my writing marks just very confused and and really very readable.

✓ I definitely prefer typing because, first of all, I'm not very good at handwriting my words, and my handwriting is confusing and not very readable.

The sentence uses adjective/adverb forms incorrectly: 'not really good at handwriting my words' is informal but acceptable; 'my writing marks just very confused' uses 'confused' which describes people, not handwriting. Use 'confusing' to describe handwriting. Also 'really very readable' is contradictory; the intended meaning is 'not very readable.' Suggestions: use 'handwriting' as a noun and pair it with appropriate adjectives like 'messy,' 'confusing,' or 'hard to read.' Keep adverb use minimal and precise.

× I basically type on the laptop every day because I usually send messages to my friends and family on laptop, uh, and I think I also tap on a desktop, uh, five days a week basically because, uh, I, I would usually, uh, have to attend the classes and I have to take notes on my desktop.

✓ I basically type on my laptop every day because I usually send messages to my friends and family on my laptop, and I think I also type on a desktop five days a week because I usually have to attend classes and take notes on my desktop.

The student omitted possessive 'my' before 'laptop' and used 'on laptop' which is incorrect; include 'my' or use 'a.' Also 'tap on a desktop' should be 'type on a desktop.' Remove unnecessary filler words. Use 'attend classes' without 'the' for general meaning. Suggestions: use correct prepositions and possessives: 'type on my laptop,' 'type on a desktop,' and avoid repeating filler.

× To be honest, I think I learned how to type on a keyboard since I was six years old, because back then my parents just bought the first computer for me and I basically could all use it.

✓ To be honest, I think I learned how to type on a keyboard when I was six years old because back then my parents bought the first computer for me and I could use it.

Use 'when' rather than 'since' to refer to a point in the past for a finished action: 'learned when I was six.' 'Since' requires present perfect if linking past to present. 'Just bought' is colloquial; simple past 'bought' is fine. 'I basically could all use it' is ungrammatical—remove 'all' and use 'I could use it.' Suggestions: use 'when I was X' for age, and keep past tense consistent (simple past) for past events.

× To be honest, I don't improve my typing intentionally. However, I do improve it uh, casually. For example, I usually, uh, taking notes on my uh, on my desktop during classes, so I just practice typing during that time.

✓ To be honest, I don't improve my typing intentionally. However, I do improve it casually. For example, I usually take notes on my desktop during classes, so I just practice typing during that time.

After 'I usually,' use the base verb form 'take,' not the -ing form 'taking.' The phrase 'improve it uh, casually' is acceptable but remove fillers. Suggestions: follow auxiliaries and adverbs with base verb forms: 'usually take,' 'I practice typing' is a correct gerund usage for the object.