Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 문법을 명확히 하고 중복 표현을 줄이세요. 주제 문장을 먼저 말하고, 그 이유를 1~2개의 구체적 근거로 연결어로 자연스럽게 이어야 합니다. 예를 들어 'typing is more comfortable'라고 했으면 왜 편한지(속도, 수정의 용이성 등) 구체적으로 설명하세요. 또한 어색한 표현('analog', 'digital is can')을 올바른 단어와 문법으로 바꾸고, 불필요한 말버릇(umm, just)을 줄이세요.

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is faster and easier to edit. For example, when I make a mistake I can correct it instantly on a computer, and I can also store and search my notes more easily.

提案: 감정 표현과 이유 제시는 좋지만 문법 오류와 중복이 많습니다. 현재 시제와 명사·동사 형태를 정확히 사용하세요('I always type', 'I feel depressed'). 한두 문장으로 주제 제시 후, 이유를 논리적으로 연결어로 이어 구체적 상황을 예로 드세요. 감정 관련 표현은 적절한 어휘('depressed' 대신 'stressed or down')를 사용하세요.

例: Yes, I type every day. I usually use my laptop because I write emails and notes for work. Typing also helps me relax; when I'm stressed I write down my thoughts and it calms me.

提案: 연결어와 시제를 바로잡고, 숫자나 사건을 정확히 표현하세요('I learned when I was ten'). 불명확한 동사 사용('run')를 피하고 'take a class'나 'join' 같은 적절한 동사로 바꾸세요. 또한 경쟁에 참가했다면 결과나 경험을 간단히 덧붙여 구체성을 높이세요.

例: I learned to type when I was ten years old because computer classes were popular then. I took a typing course and even joined a speed-typing competition, where I practiced to increase my accuracy and speed.

提案: 핵심 아이디어는 좋지만 표현이 반복적이고 모호합니다. 'practice every day'를 주제로 첫 문장을 말한 뒤, 구체적인 연습 방법(예: 타자 연습 사이트, 정확성 연습, 속도 측정)을 연결어로 설명하세요. 결과를 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

例: I improve my typing by practicing every day. For instance, I use online typing programs to do timed exercises and focus on accuracy, and I track my words-per-minute to measure progress.

× I definitely prefer typing because umm, typing is more comfortable and convenient.

✓ I definitely prefer typing because it is more comfortable and convenient.

The pronoun 'it' is needed to refer back to 'typing' and avoid repeating the noun; this is a sentence structure/clarity issue. Use 'it is' instead of repeating 'typing' for natural English.

× But writing on analog is so hard to my hand so I can write all of things what I want to write.

✓ But writing by hand is so hard on my hand that I cannot write everything I want to write.

Use 'writing by hand' or 'handwriting' instead of 'writing on analog.' The preposition 'on' should be 'on my hand' for physical difficulty, and 'so ... that' expresses result. 'Can' should be 'cannot' to match intended meaning; 'all of things what' should be 'everything that' or 'everything I want to write.' This fixes article, preposition, negation, and relative clause errors.

× But digital is can because digital is just to typing just.

✓ But with a digital device I can, because digital typing is straightforward.

'Digital is can' is ungrammatical; use a subject like 'I' with 'can.' 'Digital is just to typing just' is unclear; rephrase as 'digital typing is straightforward' or 'typing on a digital device is easy.' This corrects verb usage and sentence structure.

× To words so it can more easier write the word.

✓ Because of that, it is easier to write words.

'More easier' is incorrect — use either 'easier' or 'more easy' (but 'easier' is correct). 'To words' is unnecessary; 'write the word' should be plural 'write words' or 'write what I want.' This fixes comparative adjective misuse and word choice.

× Definitely yes. I always typing every day because I like typing.

✓ Definitely yes. I always type every day because I like typing.

The verb after 'I' should be in base form 'type' not the present participle 'typing' when expressing habitual action. This corrects verb form for simple present tense.

× I like typing sounds because it makes me comfortable and relaxed.

✓ I like the sound of typing because it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Use 'the sound of typing' rather than 'typing sounds' for natural phrasing. Also use 'makes me feel' to describe the resulting state. This corrects noun phrase and verb-complement usage.

× So when I feel depressions I just go desk and sit down and typing write down my feelings.

✓ So when I feel depressed I just go to my desk, sit down, and type to write down my feelings.

'Feel depressions' should be 'feel depressed' (adjective). Need preposition 'to' before 'my desk.' Use base verb 'type' instead of 'typing' in sequence with 'sit down.' This fixes adjective form, preposition, and verb form errors.

× I'm sad I'm depression like this so I feel very relaxed and comfortable feelings.

✓ When I'm sad or depressed like this, typing makes me feel very relaxed and comfortable.

Use 'depressed' as adjective; 'I'm depression' is incorrect. 'Feelings' is unnecessary after 'comfortable.' Rephrase to show cause-effect clearly. This corrects adjective use and redundant noun.

× When I typing.

✓ When I type.

Sentence fragment: 'When I typing' lacks a main clause and uses incorrect verb form. Change to 'When I type' and attach a main clause if needed (e.g., 'When I type, I feel better'). This fixes verb form and sentence completeness.

× I run that on 10 because that times is popular to run computer, so I reject computer class and I run typing and there are competition to fast typing so I run very fast too.

✓ I started that at age ten because computers became popular then, so I joined a typing class instead of a computer class, and there was a fast-typing competition in which I also typed very quickly.

Use past tense 'started/joined' for past events rather than 'run.' 'On 10' should be 'at age ten.' 'That times is popular' should be 'then computers became popular.' 'Reject' should be 'joined instead of' or 'didn't take.' 'There are competition' should be 'there was a competition.' This corrects multiple tense and word choice errors.

× Uh, I think that's very important to do every day because typing is just memory, I think.

✓ Uh, I think it's very important to practice every day because typing is largely a matter of memory, I think.

Use 'practise' (practice) as a verb and natural phrase 'a matter of memory.' Keep present tense 'is' but clarify noun usage. This fixes word choice and clarity.

× So I think, uh, don't lose all memory.

✓ So I think, uh, I shouldn't lose all that memory.

Add subject 'I' and modal 'shouldn't' to make grammatical sense; 'don't lose all memory' is ungrammatical and unclear. This corrects pronoun/subject omission and modality.

× So everyday typing is remain, remember, can memories.

✓ So by typing every day, I can retain my memory and remember better.

Original mixes words incorrectly. Use 'by typing every day' for habitual action, 'retain' for memory retention, and 'remember better' for clarity. This corrects tense and verb choice.

× So it's helpful to improve your ability.

✓ So it's helpful for improving your ability.

Use 'helpful for improving' or 'helps improve' for natural collocation. This corrects preposition and gerund usage.

× So I think I'm improve my typing for practice.

✓ So I think I improve my typing by practicing.

Use 'I improve' or better 'I improve my typing by practicing.' Remove incorrect auxiliary 'I'm improve.' Use gerund 'practicing' with 'by.' This corrects verb form and pronoun/auxiliary misuse.