Typing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference, then give one or two specific reasons with coherent linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "my new emotion" and redundant clauses about memory.

例: I prefer handwriting. For example, writing by hand feels more personal and helps me remember information better, so I often keep handwritten journals to capture my thoughts and emotions.

提案: Make the answer more natural by tightening language and correcting phrasing. Use one strong reason and a short example. Avoid awkward phrases like "typing it on the keyboard" and "in this stage and age."

例: Yes, I type on a laptop every day for study and leisure because it's convenient. For instance, I write assignments and chat with friends on my laptop, which saves time compared with handwriting.

提案: Clarify timeline and use correct verb forms. Remove filler words and give a specific brief anecdote with linking words. Correct awkward expressions like "my mom touched me."

例: I learned to type about ten years ago when I first used my family's laptop as a child. My mother showed me basic keys, and I practiced daily, so that early lesson has stayed with me.

提案: Avoid repetition and be specific about practice methods. Mention concrete activities and progress. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar errors.

例: I improve my typing by practicing daily on my laptop; for example, I use online typing exercises to increase speed and accuracy, and I also type class notes quickly to build consistency.

× I love something that holds the traditional values and sometimes quite classic writing can also spread my emotion, my new emotion, as well as serve as a way for memories and serve as a memory.

✓ I love things that hold traditional values, and sometimes rather classic handwriting can also convey my feelings and serve as a way to preserve memories.

The sentence uses incorrect and awkward quantifiers and nouns ('something' with 'holds the traditional values', 'my new emotion', 'serve as a way for memories'). Use plural 'things' for general preferences and 'handwriting' for the activity. Replace 'spread my emotion' with 'convey my feelings' and 'serve as a way to preserve memories' to be natural and grammatical. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Typing it on the keyboard is very convenient, especially in this stage and age when digital platforms are prevalent in almost every forms of communication.

✓ Typing on the keyboard is very convenient, especially in this stage of life and age when digital platforms are prevalent in almost every form of communication.

Errors include unnecessary pronoun 'it' after 'Typing' and wrong quantifier 'every forms' (should be singular 'every form') and awkward phrase 'stage and age'—better 'stage of life and age' or simply 'today'. Also use 'form' not 'forms' after 'every'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× I learned to type on the keyboard 10 years ago when I was a child, uh, first exposed to the laptop.

✓ I learned to type on the keyboard 10 years ago when I was a child and was first exposed to a laptop.

The clause 'first exposed to the laptop' lacks a subject and auxiliary and needs past passive 'was first exposed' to be grammatical. Also use 'a laptop' rather than 'the laptop' because it's non-specific. Grammar problem type ID:5

× My mom touched me how to do that and that's memory always impact on my mind and I always remember that memories.

✓ My mom showed me how to do it, and that memory has always stayed with me; I always remember it.

'Touched me how to do that' is incorrect verb choice and use of pronoun; 'showed me how to do it' is correct. 'That's memory always impact on my mind' has tense and structure issues—use present perfect 'has always stayed with me'. Avoid plural 'that memories' when referring to a single memory. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I can say that I practice typing almost every day. I using I use my laptop almost every day for both my studies and entertainment.

✓ I can say that I practice typing almost every day. I use my laptop almost every day for both my studies and for entertainment.

'I using I use' contains redundant and incorrect form 'using'. Remove 'using'. Maintain simple present 'I use' for habitual actions. Add parallel preposition 'for' before 'entertainment' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:6

× This is also additive support for my training and practice and typing.

✓ This also provides additional support for my training and practice in typing.

'Additive support' is unnatural; use 'additional support'. Word order 'training and practice and typing' is awkward—reorder to 'training and practice in typing'. Grammar problem type ID:13