Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ понятен по смыслу, но формулировки часто неестественные и грамматически ошибочные. Вместо «I so much like it» используйте «I really like it» или «I strongly prefer it». Фраза «in the window» должна быть заменена на «by the window» или «through the window». Также нужно правильно построить предложение: «when I travel, I can see…». Исправьте «lace» на «lakes», а перед неисчисляемым словом «architecture» не используйте «a». Сначала дайте прямой ответ, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины и используйте связку «because».

例: Yes, I definitely prefer sitting by the window because I enjoy looking at the scenery while I travel. I can see forests, lakes, and interesting architecture along the way. It also makes long journeys feel more relaxing.

提案: Ответ содержит хорошую основную идею — поездки объединяли семью, — но не отвечает на вопрос грамматически и логически. Используйте прошедшее время: «Yes, I did» и «We went», поскольку вопрос относится к детству. Необходимо заменить «He absolutely likes it» на «I really enjoyed them», так как речь идёт о поездках, а не о другом человеке. Избегайте повторов «another/others» и «and». Добавьте конкретную деталь: куда вы ездили, сколько длилась поездка или чем вы занимались вместе. Оптимальная структура: прямой ответ, место или продолжительность, затем причина или результат.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family often took long trips to the countryside, and the journeys sometimes lasted several hours. Although they were tiring, they brought us closer because we talked, relaxed, and spent quality time together.

× Yeah, I so much like it because in the window I can see all of what I were here am travelling a lot of lace forests, lakes and a beautiful architecture.

✓ Yeah, I like it very much because from the window I can see a lot of lovely forests, lakes, and beautiful architecture.

Use from the window, not in the window, because the view comes from the window. The preposition from indicates the source of the view.

× Yeah, I so much like it because in the window I can see all of what I were here am travelling a lot of lace forests, lakes and a beautiful architecture.

✓ Yeah, I like it very much because from the window I can see a lot of lovely forests, lakes, and beautiful architecture.

The adverb very much normally follows the verb or its object: I like it very much. The phrase I so much like it is not natural in this context.

× Yeah, I so much like it because in the window I can see all of what I were here am travelling a lot of lace forests, lakes and a beautiful architecture.

✓ Yeah, I like it very much because from the window I can see a lot of lovely forests, lakes, and beautiful architecture.

The question asks about a general preference, so the present tense like is appropriate. The original sequence I were here am travelling is grammatically incomplete and does not fit the meaning.

× Yeah, I so much like it because in the window I can see all of what I were here am travelling a lot of lace forests, lakes and a beautiful architecture.

✓ Yeah, I like it very much because from the window I can see a lot of lovely forests, lakes, and beautiful architecture.

Use a lot of before plural countable nouns such as forests and lakes. The phrase all of what is not appropriate here because the speaker is introducing examples of scenery.

× Yeah, I so much like it because in the window I can see all of what I were here am travelling a lot of lace forests, lakes and a beautiful architecture.

✓ Yeah, I like it very much because from the window I can see a lot of lovely forests, lakes, and beautiful architecture.

Architecture is generally an uncountable noun when referring to buildings or building styles in general, so it does not take a before it. Use beautiful architecture, not a beautiful architecture.

× He absolutely likes it

✓ I absolutely liked it.

The student is describing their own experience, so the subject pronoun must be I, not he. The pronoun should agree with the intended speaker.

× He absolutely likes it

✓ I absolutely liked it.

The question asks about a journey during childhood, which is a completed past event. Therefore, use the past-tense verb liked instead of the present-tense verb likes.

× We going to others another place

✓ We went to another place.

The journey happened in the past, so go must be changed to its irregular past form went. The original form going is not suitable here.

× We going to others another place

✓ We went to another place.

Use another before a singular countable noun to mean one more or a different one. The word others cannot be used directly before the singular noun place.

× He absolutely likes it It's united us We going to others another place and and just relaxing and spending time together.

✓ I absolutely liked it. It brought us closer together. We went to another place and just relaxed and spent time together.

The original answer contains several sentences joined without proper punctuation and includes incomplete verb phrases. Separate the ideas into complete sentences, each with a subject and a correctly formed verb.

× and just relaxing and spending time together.

✓ and just relaxed and spent time together.

Because the journey took place in the past, both coordinated verbs should be in the past tense: relaxed and spent. Keeping both verbs in the same tense also creates parallel structure.