Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答结构清晰，先直接表达偏好，再给出原因和具体细节，内容也比较丰富。需要注意语法和搭配：“scenery”通常是不可数名词，不能说“sceneries”；“is shooting to the eyes”表达不自然，应改为“is soothing to the eyes”或“is easy on the eyes”；“scenery”是单数不可数名词，因此后面应使用“helps”。另外，可以避免重复使用“beautiful”，让词汇更加多样。

例: Definitely, I prefer a window seat on long journeys because I can enjoy the scenery outside. The green countryside is soothing to the eyes and helps me relax. I also like watching the landscape change as we travel, which makes the journey more enjoyable.

提案: 回答有具体经历，使用了目的地、交通方式和时长，因此内容较有效。但存在多处语法和表达问题：“while I was a child”应改为“when I was a child”；“which took more than 48 hours”指代不够清楚，可以改为“the journey took more than 48 hours”；“training”应为“tiring”；“I remember enjoy”应为“I remember enjoying”。此外，最后一句使用“and although”造成结构混乱，建议用“Although... , I...”或直接用“Despite being tiring, ...”连接原因和感受。

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child, my family and I took a train to Xinjiang, and the journey lasted more than 48 hours. Although it was quite tiring, I remember enjoying the beautiful scenery along the way. It was a long trip, but it was also a memorable family experience.

× The green sceneries is shooting to the eyes and help me relax.

✓ The green scenery is shooting to the eyes and help me relax.

“Scenery”通常是不可数名词，不能使用复数形式“sceneries”来表示一般的自然景色。应使用“scenery”。

× The green sceneries is shooting to the eyes and help me relax.

✓ The green scenery is soothing to the eyes and help me relax.

“Shooting”表示“射击的”或“快速移动的”，不能表达“令人舒缓、使眼睛感到舒服”的意思。这里应使用形容词“soothing”。

× The green sceneries is shooting to the eyes and help me relax.

✓ The green scenery is shooting to the eyes and helps me relax.

主语“The green scenery”是第三人称单数，因此一般现在时中动词“help”应加“-s”，变为“helps”。

× We took a train to Xinjiang which took more than 48 hours and although the trip was training and I remember enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way.

✓ We took a train to Xinjiang, which took more than 48 hours. Although the trip was tiring, I remember enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way.

“Training”表示“训练”，不能用来描述旅途让人感到疲惫。这里应使用形容词“tiring”，表示“令人疲惫的”。

× We took a train to Xinjiang which took more than 48 hours and although the trip was training and I remember enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way.

✓ We took a train to Xinjiang, which took more than 48 hours. Although the trip was tiring, I remember enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way.

原句中同时使用“and”和“although”，导致句子连接混乱。可以将内容拆分成两个句子，并使用“Although”引导让步从句，使结构更清晰。

× We took a train to Xinjiang which took more than 48 hours and although the trip was training and I remember enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way.

✓ We took a train to Xinjiang, which took more than 48 hours. Although the trip was tiring, I remember enjoying the beautiful scenery along the way.

动词“remember”后面表示“记得做过某事”时，通常接动名词形式“remember doing something”。因此“enjoy”应改为“enjoying”。