Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答有明确观点，但存在较多语法和搭配错误，例如“see by the window”应改为“sit by the window”，“when I traveling”应改为“when I travel”，“enjoy in the view”应改为“enjoy the view”。“different cities seen”表达不自然，可以说“see different cities and landscapes”。内容基本相关，但理由重复，且缺少具体例子。建议使用“because”和“also”连接理由，并控制在2—3句内，使表达更自然、有效。

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I can enjoy the view. I especially like watching the changing landscapes and seeing different cities from above. It also makes the journey more relaxing and enjoyable.

提案: 回答试图表达童年和家人旅行的经历，但时态、句型和词语搭配问题较多。“I have”应改为过去时“I had”，“go a long journey”应改为“go on a long journey”，“when I was seven years old”前不需要“for”。“travel to continue”意思不清楚，建议直接说明旅行地点、时长和活动。最后一句出现重复和自我修正，影响流利度。可以用“for example”补充一个具体地点或记忆，并用过去时保持一致。

例: Yes, I did. When I was seven, my family and I took a long trip to the countryside. The journey took about six hours, but I enjoyed looking at the scenery and spending time with my parents. It was a memorable experience because we visited several beautiful places.

× Yes, I prefer to see by the window when I traveling because it's a good way to see different cities seen and I can enjoy in the view and it's a good way to learn. It's good way to enjoy different vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it's a good way to see different cities, and I can enjoy the view. It's also a good way to learn and enjoy different vibes.

在表达旅行时的习惯或偏好时，应使用一般现在时。不能说“when I traveling”，因为主语“I”后面不能直接接现在分词。应改为“when I travel”。建议：描述习惯、偏好或经常发生的事情时，使用“主语 + 动词原形”；只有在进行时结构中才使用“be + 动词-ing”。

× Yes, I prefer to see by the window when I traveling because it's a good way to see different cities seen and I can enjoy in the view and it's a good way to learn. It's good way to enjoy different vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it's a good way to see different cities, and I can enjoy the view. It's also a good way to learn and enjoy different vibes.

“prefer to”后面应接动词原形，因此“prefer to see”在语法上可以成立，但结合问题“sit by the window”更自然。原句中的“when I traveling”缺少助动词，不能直接使用“-ing”形式。应使用“when I travel”，或者说“when I am traveling”。

× Yes, I prefer to see by the window when I traveling because it's a good way to see different cities seen and I can enjoy in the view and it's a good way to learn. It's good way to enjoy different vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it's a good way to see different cities, and I can enjoy the view. It's also a good way to learn and enjoy different vibes.

“cities seen”中的“seen”是过去分词，不能直接放在“cities”后面表达“看不同的城市”。这里应直接说“see different cities”。如果想使用分词结构，需要完整的结构，例如“different cities that I see”。

× Yes, I prefer to see by the window when I traveling because it's a good way to see different cities seen and I can enjoy in the view and it's a good way to learn. It's good way to enjoy different vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it's a good way to see different cities, and I can enjoy the view. It's also a good way to learn and enjoy different vibes.

英语中通常说“enjoy the view”，动词“enjoy”后面直接接宾语，不需要介词“in”。因此“enjoy in the view”应改为“enjoy the view”。另外，表示坐在窗户旁边时，常用“sit by the window”。

× Yes, I prefer to see by the window when I traveling because it's a good way to see different cities seen and I can enjoy in the view and it's a good way to learn. It's good way to enjoy different vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it's a good way to see different cities, and I can enjoy the view. It's also a good way to learn and enjoy different vibes.

可数名词单数“way”前面通常需要冠词，因此“It's good way”应改为“It's a good way”。此外，“view”在这里指具体的景色，通常说“the view”。

× Yes, I prefer to see by the window when I traveling because it's a good way to see different cities seen and I can enjoy in the view and it's a good way to learn. It's good way to enjoy different vibe.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because it's a good way to see different cities, and I can enjoy the view. It's also a good way to learn and enjoy different vibes.

“different”后面可以接可数名词复数。这里谈论不同的旅行氛围，使用“different vibes”更合适。也可以说“a different vibe”，但这时必须使用不定冠词“a”。

× Yes, I have a lot of time with my family to go a long journey for when I was seven years old. I always travel to continue with my family and there is a there are there is a beautiful place.

✓ Yes, I spent a lot of time traveling with my family when I was seven years old. We often went on long journeys together, and there were many beautiful places.

问题询问的是童年时期的经历，属于过去时间，因此应使用一般过去时。原句中的“have”和“travel”应根据语境改为“spent”和“went”。描述过去经常发生的事情时，可以使用“often + 一般过去时”。

× Yes, I have a lot of time with my family to go a long journey for when I was seven years old. I always travel to continue with my family and there is a there are there is a beautiful place.

✓ Yes, I spent a lot of time traveling with my family when I was seven years old. We often went on long journeys together, and there were many beautiful places.

“spend time”后面通常接“动词-ing”形式，所以应说“spent a lot of time traveling”，而不是“have a lot of time to go”。常见结构是“spend time doing something”，表示“花时间做某事”。

× Yes, I have a lot of time with my family to go a long journey for when I was seven years old. I always travel to continue with my family and there is a there are there is a beautiful place.

✓ Yes, I spent a lot of time traveling with my family when I was seven years old. We often went on long journeys together, and there were many beautiful places.

英语中说“go on a journey”或“go on a trip”，不能说“go a journey”。另外，“for when I was seven years old”中的“for”多余，应直接说“when I was seven years old”。

× Yes, I have a lot of time with my family to go a long journey for when I was seven years old. I always travel to continue with my family and there is a there are there is a beautiful place.

✓ Yes, I spent a lot of time traveling with my family when I was seven years old. We often went on long journeys together, and there were many beautiful places.

原句中的“there is a there are there is”是多个“There be”结构混用，不能这样连续使用。由于后面的“places”是复数，而且叙述的是过去经历，应使用“there were many beautiful places”。记住：单数用“there was/is”，复数用“there were/are”。