Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, then give one clear reason and a specific detail. Use natural expressions such as “look out of the window” and “watch the scenery go by.” “Environment” is too general here, and “field liverage” is unclear and appears to be an incorrect word choice. Also, connect the ideas more smoothly and avoid repeating “travel.”

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, I can watch the fields, mountains, and villages go by during the journey. It also makes the trip feel more relaxing.

提案: Your answer is direct and gives a reason, but the phrasing is unnatural. Say “my parents didn’t have much time to take me anywhere” instead of “didn’t have more time to bring me out from home.” Use “when I was a child” to make the time reference clear, and add a specific example or brief result to make the answer more developed.

例: No, I didn’t. When I was a child, my parents didn’t have much free time to take me on long trips because they were busy with work. As a result, we usually spent our holidays at home or visited nearby places.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I always look outside into environment and field liverage along the way I travel.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I always look outside at the environment and the fields along the way.

The preposition at is more appropriate than into when describing looking at something outside. Into usually suggests movement inside something or examining it closely. The phrase along the way is sufficient here, so along the way I travel is unnecessarily repetitive.

× Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I always look outside into environment and field liverage along the way I travel.

✓ Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel. I always look outside at the environment and the fields along the way.

The definite article the is needed before environment because the speaker is referring to the surroundings visible during the journey. The plural noun fields also refers to particular visible areas outside.

× To be honest, I never had a long journey with my family because my parents didn't have more time to bring me out from home to see many things in the world.

✓ To be honest, I never had a long journey with my family because my parents didn't have much time to take me out of the house to see many things in the world.

More time normally compares the amount of time with an amount mentioned earlier. Here, the intended meaning is that the parents had a limited amount of time, so much time is the appropriate quantifier.

× To be honest, I never had a long journey with my family because my parents didn't have more time to bring me out from home to see many things in the world.

✓ To be honest, I never had a long journey with my family because my parents didn't have much time to take me out of the house to see many things in the world.

The natural preposition is out of when describing movement from inside a house to the outside. The expression take me out of the house is also appropriate because the parents are moving the child with them.