Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly in the first sentence by stating whether you prefer a window seat. Avoid repeated fillers such as “uh” and “umm,” and correct the grammar in “that’s is” and “I flew.” The information about travelling from Jeju Island to Taipei does not explain your seating preference, so add a specific reason, such as enjoying the view or having more privacy. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your preference and reason.

例: Yes, I prefer to sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy looking at the scenery. For example, on a flight from Jeju Island to Taipei, I could watch the coastline and clouds during the journey. It also gives me a little more privacy, which makes the trip more relaxing.

提案: Respond directly about whether you had a long journey with your family as a child; the current answer discusses a general preference and an apparently unrelated trip. Use the past tense consistently and give a clear example, including where you went, who travelled with you, and how long the journey took. Avoid repeating the question introduction and the phrase “when I have a holiday.” Link the details with words such as “when,” “because,” and “although.”

例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was about ten years old. We travelled with my mother from Jeju Island to Seoul, and the trip took several hours because we had to take a ferry and then a bus. Although I felt tired, I enjoyed talking with my family and seeing different parts of Korea.

× Uh, that's is an interesting, uh, question.

✓ Uh, that is an interesting question.

That is already contains the subject that and the verb is. The extra is creates an incorrect verb structure. Avoid repeating the verb after a contraction or its expanded form.

× When I have a holiday, I flew from Teju Island, South Korea to Taipei, Taiwan.

✓ When I have a holiday, I fly from Jeju Island, South Korea, to Taipei, Taiwan.

The question asks about a general preference, so the present simple is needed. Use fly, not flew, to describe a usual or repeated activity. Also, the island is commonly spelled Jeju Island.

× I like traveling in my daily life when I have a holiday, I flew from Teju Island, South Korea to Taipei, Taiwan after I arrived in Thai.

✓ I like traveling. When I have a holiday, I fly from Jeju Island, South Korea, to Taipei, Taiwan.

The original response joins several complete ideas with commas, creating an unclear run-on sentence. Separate the ideas into two sentences and give each sentence a clear structure. The phrase after I arrived in Thai is also unnecessary here because it does not clearly support the answer.

× I prefer traveling with my mother rather than traveling, uh, being alone, uh, when I have a holiday, I flew from Teju Island, South Korea to Taipei, Taiwan after I arrived in Taipei, Taiwan.

✓ I preferred traveling with my mother rather than traveling alone when I was a child. During one holiday, I flew from Jeju Island, South Korea, to Taipei, Taiwan.

The question asks about a past experience during childhood, so the main verbs should be in the past tense: preferred and was. Use preferred rather than prefer when describing a past preference. The phrase traveling alone is the natural parallel structure after traveling with my mother. Separate the past experience into clear sentences.