Travelling— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly, but add a brief reason and a specific detail. For example, explain what you enjoy about the window seat, such as the view or having more personal space. Use a linking word such as “because” to connect your preference with the reason.

例: Yes, I do, because I enjoy looking at the scenery during a journey. I also find window seats more relaxing because I can lean against the wall and avoid being disturbed.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and use the past tense consistently because you are describing a childhood experience. Replace “I have” with “I had,” and use “we went” rather than “now we went.” Avoid hesitations and repetitions, and add one or two specific details about the journey, such as how you travelled or how long it took.

例: Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child. We travelled to Spain by plane to visit my aunt and her family. It was exciting because I had not seen them for several years.

× Yes, I have a long journey with my family when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a long journey with my family when I was a child.

The question uses the past tense, and the time expression when I was a child refers to a completed past event. Therefore, use had instead of have.

× Now we went to Spain Uh to we to visit my aunt and her family.

✓ We went to Spain to visit my aunt and her family.

The journey happened in the past, so went is appropriate. However, now usually refers to the present and is unnecessary here. Remove it to make the time reference clear.

× Now we went to Spain Uh to we to visit my aunt and her family.

✓ We went to Spain to visit my aunt and her family.

The phrase to we to is incorrectly structured. After went to Spain, use the infinitive phrase to visit. The correct structure is went to + place + to + base verb.